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heart I always saw her as rare as she was. She is the stars in the night sky, the sun over the mountentop, and no won ever noticed her. Not even her own family, but to me she'a everything,my sunshine and my stars. I could never live whithout her not even for a sec. Her the girl no won ever noticed except me. heart
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- | Submitted on 08/13/2010 |
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- Title: Her
- Artist: mymonkey4321
- Description: something i wrote in 6Th grade
- Date: 08/13/2010
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- MartianSongbird - 09/19/2010
- I'm with Vintage. Please master the english language before writing bad poetry.
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- GinjaSmile - 08/15/2010
- well, its ok. i think that if u edited it a little it would work. lke a different setup. make it into lines. its ok, but it would make it seem longer and more poetic that way
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- Vintage Dreams - 08/13/2010
- Typos love . And not worth 100 gold to enter... sorry, even if you wrote this in 6th grade, I wouldn't be any nicer in my comment. D:
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