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My life is black, I cannot see, of what has come from me. The pain, the suffer, is just another thing I am sad, mad, scared about. What has come of me?
Will I live? Or will I die? I try to get out, leave this terribal place, But nothing, no joy or hope. But what, what's that? I see a light. I follow the light. I know what I must do. Stop trying just let it happen. Stop lieing. Love my life just the way it is. Now, I am in all light. Nothing is wrong. I am back where i belong. Where I should be. For now, and for eternity.
- by jbrosnumber1fan |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/14/2008 |
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- Title: the light
- Artist: jbrosnumber1fan
- Description: This is a poem of what I felt. I am 12 years old so please no mean comments.
- Date: 08/14/2008
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Comments (4 Comments)
- XPeanutButter_DangorousX - 03/13/2009
- well i liked it and its ok to be twelve...because im 12 to....i loved it though you miss spelled terrible....but i still liked it!!!!....
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- Revie Creation - 02/17/2009
- it's a bit choppy no flow but i guess thats pretty good for a 12 year old though i wouldn't say you have a gift for poetry
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- your nemises - 12/25/2008
- it's not really poetry it could be a lot better
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- -Cynical Sexy Bear- - 12/14/2008
- Hmm. Sorry, dear. It's cliche. I understand it's what you're feeling but maybe it would be a bit more realiving to express it in a creative way. Also, the way you set the poem kinda irriatates me. I prefer it line by line instead of paragraph form.
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