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 Posted: Thu Dec 02, 2010 12:21 pm
I don't think I've posted anything in here in over a year. :c
(Doesn't help that it'd been almost that long since I'd drawn anything worth trying to get critique for...)
I'd really appreciate a quick crit for this one. It's a commish I'm working on. The only part that's really bugging me is the hand at the top. I can't tell if it's backwards still, or if the arm itself is the problem, and I'd really appreciate some clarification from somebody who gets anatomy a little better than I do. Haha.
I'm hoping to get this inked and finished up today.
Comments, critique, etc. all welcome, please and thanks!
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Posted: Thu Dec 02, 2010 1:58 pm
It's very beautiful? Is it for me!? If not it, should be!!! blaugh rofl
The only real problem I see is the leg. I can't tell if you intend it to be bent without shading but if it's supposed to be straight, it's too short compared to her standing leg.
Also, the pointy thing on top of the head, is it supposed to be part of a headdress or the hair because as part of the hair, it doesn't fit in. Hair that long would be too heavy to spike above the scalp like that.
Oh! and her top! Again, I can't tell what you intend w/o color and shading but to me it looks like a tube top with some light veil-like material on top but it seems like the tube top cuts off at the boob without the material wrapping around her back.
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Posted: Thu Dec 02, 2010 2:34 pm
You did really great on this picture
It is a unique, and very difficult pose.
but there is some corrections you can make that i can see,
make the back leg that is up alitte tinsy bit longer, also the foot seems to be in an akward shape, but it still looks somewhat correct. (sorry i don't really explain how to help on that part.
the torso is turned a little to much. in this type of pose the torso needs to be a bit more to the side like it would be in a side view, because of the way you have her abdomn turned. (i could red line to explain what i mean if you'd like me to do that?)
also her face proportion is a bit strange to, well how you have her head turned it is alright but her facial proportions are more as if she is more than 3/4 view over, but how you placed it is a little off (if this makes sence lol)
her arms seem pretty much proportional. just a little tweeks and i think it will look really good.
Also at her head, you need to make it more round, just a little where it points and comes up from the bangs...
other wise than that you did a really good job. this sketch is really enchanting and has a very cool scene to it.
I really do like it. you did a good job on the anatomy as tough as it is .
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Posted: Thu Dec 02, 2010 3:29 pm
Thanks both, for the kind words. (:
@xena: The pointy thing is a headdress with feathers on it, hair is one of my favourite things to draw, I hope I wouldn't horribly mess up parting that much. d:
There is a bit of a line showing the top going behind her back, but it is very faint even on paper, I can't even really make it out on the image.
I think I can fix the leg problem mentioned by both of you by lifting it another 15 degrees or so, so it looks like it's turned a bit more with the body, it might make the turning of the torso look a bit more natural too, but I'm unsure.
Also, I will curve out the hair at the top a little, the pointiness didn't really bother me, her hair was just lifting off her scalp more in my mind, but it's true that it would probably be much too heavy for that, and that's just a minor change, so. (:
@seks-pistol: A redline would be awesome if you were up for it, I didn't post asking for one because I wasn't really expecting any offers.
I've still not quite gotten the hang of doing faces not at a 3/4, it should be more a 4/5 or so I think, I just never know how to draw the mostly hidden part of the face. =/
Gonna have to go see if I can find a quick resource for that.
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