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[Psychotic.Ballerina]

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Posted: Sat Mar 31, 2007 10:22 pm

This is a poem dedicated to a friend who took his own life, Please don't copy this without my permission. Please tell me what you guys think of it. =)

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I'm so dead and hollow
I'm screaming for answers
What went wrong?
Why did you do it?

We're all left wondering
We're all left in pain
All these tears flow
They're all for you

I've heard so many stories
But many more lies
Why Josh? Why?
I care about you

We just want an answer
So we can sleep at night
but you left us so suddenly
without even a good-bye

I wear the heartagram
in dedication to you
We miss you Josh
I know you miss us too

You were so different
but that didn't matter
You made us so proud
We stood up for you

Your smile is immortal
It's burned in our minds
I smile when I remember it
but it drives me to cry

I still have your pictures
and your messages on MySpace
Your birthday's on my calender
It's too close to your death date

There's so many questions
We search for one answer
The one we'll never find
Why Josh? Why?

Posted: Sun Apr 01, 2007 2:18 pm

1.LOVED IT
2.OMG are you serious?? Your friends commited suicide?! gonk crying

Chortleasd

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Viese Servatika

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Posted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 4:13 am

Wow. Lots of emotion. It's so sad too.
It's a nice poem.

Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 10:35 am

Karinja-chan

1.LOVED IT
2.OMG are you serious?? Your friends commited suicide?! gonk crying

Thanks.

Yep, he took his own life. It was only a week before his 16th birthday. I still can't stop feeling guilty for not spending enough time with him.

[Psychotic.Ballerina]

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Chortleasd

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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 9:22 am

You're not alone
Together we stand
I'll be by your side
You know I'll take your hand
When it gets cold
And it feels like the end
There's no place to go
You know I won't give in

NOOOOOOOO!!*runs under a rock and cries*

So far away
I wish you were here
Before it's too late
This could all disappear
Before the doors close
And it comes to an end
With you by my side
I will fight and defend

Posted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 1:23 pm

It's a great poem. I'm sorry about your friend.

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frewty

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Posted: Sat Jun 28, 2008 7:14 am

I Like it, Its deep.
Great job, Keep writing.

Poem Is my addiction I read it and comment on it no matter how old it is.
Show me your poetry. NOW!

Its 2008, Be aware.

Posted: Fri Aug 01, 2008 12:56 pm

very creative and so unique i love it!! keep it up!

_PRECiOUS-HAiTiAN_

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Rin Kairiu

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Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 8:27 pm

My poetic response. 3nodding

Tis a thing of beauty,
What true emotion shows.
Like the dark waves of the sea
Or the feathery wind that blows.

Once spoken from the heart
The soul never truly forgets
What we want and need from life,
As we gamble and loose our bets.

Soemthings are regained, but
Others are lost for good. Just
Like sweet, sweet poetry.....
We love and treasure what we must.

I truly did love your poem. Keep up your excellent work.

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