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 Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:17 pm
Sorry about that sweatdrop I had accidentally left it in there from the previous version of the profile. Anything Else that I need to fix?
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:23 pm
Ξ The Contents Of My Heart Ξ XXXX x x xFull Name : Kaika Vreal x x xCurrently Known As : Kaika l Vreal l Kaix x xAge : Fifteen | 15x x xBirthdate : October Twenty Seventh | 10-27x x xAstrology Sign : Eastern │ Roosterx x xRace : French | Greek x x xHeight : Five Foot - Eleven | 5'11 x x xWeight : One Hundred - Seventy | 170lbx x xOriginal Eye Color : Brownx x xPersonality : Kaika is a man of honor and love for his home. He loves the land of his birth, and while reluctant to fight, will go through hell and back to protect his land. He is a friendly man but will not banter you with words as he likes to get straight to the heart of the problem. He is blunt and will not spares feelings in the wake of honesty. All in all, he is a true man. x x xFamily :x x x• [ Vleadr Vreal ] Father
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x x x• Ξ My Path I My Own, You Cannon Change It ΞXXXX x x xNinja Class : Taijutsux x xNinja Sub-Class : Samuraix x xClass Attributes : Lower Body Training: Speed slightly increased.
x x x x x x x x x x x : Meager Muscles: Physical endurance slightly increasedx x xPersonal Attributes :Learn Taijutsu [ 1 ] Post Faster - Learn Doton [ 1 ] Post Faster x x xLearning Reductions :Learn Taijutsu one [1] post faster x x xRank : Genin | Low Ranked Ninjax x xNindo : "I do not wish to fight, but my land demands that I must" x x xVillage : Sunakagure | Sandx x xKekkei Genkai : Kaguya | Bone Corpse Pathwayx x xChakra Pool : 195x x xChakra Color : Dark Blue x x xChakra Element : Doton [ Earth ] | Fuuton [ Wind ]x x xBattle Strength : Speed | Fuutonx x xBattle Weakness : Hyuuton | Multiple Targets Ξ I Put Down The Rake, I Take Up The Blade ΞXXXXx x xWeapon Type : Keyblade │ Japanese Swordx x xWeapon Name : Thornx x xWeapon Range : Short | Midx x xWeapon Location : Strapped To Lower Back Ξ I Have To Learn,Knowledge Is Key ΞXXXXx x x Kaguya Clan ││ Bone Corpse Pathway x x x•
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x x x•x x xDoton ││ Earthx x x•
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x x x•x x x Fuuton ││ Windx x x•
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x x x•x x x Maruton ││ Non-Elemental x x x• Henge no Jutsu [ Transformation Technique ]
x x x• Kawarimi no Jutsu [ Substitution Technique ]
x x x• Bushin no Jutsu [ Clone Technique ]
x x x• Suimen Hokou no Waza [ Act of Water Surface Walking ]
x x x• Kinobori no Waza [ Act of Tree Climbing ]
x x x• Kai [ Release ]
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:27 pm
Yes. Your Chakra Pool should be "275" because you add + 25 cp from your subclass, which in this case is the Medical Subclass.
Hm, this is just a suggestion but in your strength's area, your first attribute is a bit vague. What about healing is she particularly strong on? Something along the lines of more concentration that helps her in her work as a medic or other. Make sure it's reasonable.
For your class attributes be sure to also include the Medical's class attribute.
For your personal attribute; please set some parameters. You could say; "She is able to sense what others may not at times." Or simply, Highly observant.
Your limitations should be fixed. Your character is unable learn taijutsu because of what you chose for your character classes.
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:40 pm
Sorry, I missed your post x.X
Fall: It's a nice template but you forgot to have jutsu limitations in your profile as well as the general (not main weapon) inventory, AC and Ryo, Missions, and some other stuff.
It's preferred if you can follow the guild's original template or at least include the entirety of things this one is lacking.
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:44 pm
Tsukino17 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ρ є r ѕ σ η α ℓ • ∂ α т α|├▬
Full Name: Tsukino 'Hime' Kazuki
Nickname: Tsuki, Moonlight Beauty
Age: 17
Birthdate: March 21
Gender: Female
Height: 5'6
Weight: 119
Nindo: "Determination makes up for a difference in strength!"
Personality: Very sweet and gentle.She usually is very encouraging.She is smart and resourceful and quite the flirt.She tries her best in everything she does so she does not bring shame to her family.She is confident but not overconfident.
Village: Konoha
Rank: Genin
Main Class: Ninjutsu
Subclass: Medical
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Chakra Pool: 275
Chakra Element: Water
Chakra Color: Emerald Green
Chakra Materialization: Her materializes as tiny crescent moons.
Strengths:
• Healing- She is a skilled medical nin with knowledge that surpasses her actual age. She uses that to develop unique medical skills and effectively heal her targets.
• Close Combat
Weaknesses:
• Weapons
• Wind Jutsu
Fears:
• Spiders
• Death
Class Attributes:
• Learn ninjutsu one [1] post faster.
• Ninjutsu limit of this class split amongst elements.
• Class Attribute - Secret Drop: Backup reserve of [25] chakra.
• Able to learn eiseijutsu.
• Class Attribute - Faulty Precision: Accuracy with techniques slightly increased
Reductions:
• Able to learn eiseijutsu.
• Class Attribute - Faulty Precision: Accuracy with techniques slightly increased
Personal Attributes:
• Highly Observant
• Learns one Extra Taijutsu style
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Ryo: 0
AC: 0
Missions Complete: 0
D Rank :: 0
C Rank :: 0
B Rank :: 0
A Rank :: 0
S Rank :: 0
Limitations:
• Ninjutsu : : 06/ 06
• Genjutsu : : 02/ 02
• Taijutsu Styles: : 01 / 01
• Eseijutsu Styles: : 08/ 08
• Bukijutsu Styles: : 01 / 01
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Summon Sage: No
Pacts: None
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• 15 kunai
• 15 senbon
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Maruton: {Start with the following six only}
• Henge no Jutsu [ Transformation Technique ]
• Kawarimi no Jutsu [ Substitution Technique ]
• Bushin no Jutsu [ Clone Technique ]
• Suimen Hokou no Waza [ Act of Water Surface Walking ]
• Kinobori no Waza [ Act of Tree Climbing ]
• Kai [ Release ]
Water
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Eseijutsu
• Diagnose
• Cleanse
• Shiatsu
• Power of Resistance
• Extraction
• Blood Cogulation
• Oxygen Supply
• Bandage Skill
•Poison Removal
•Healing Hands Minor
• Living Light Daggers
• Adrenaline Pulse
• Soten Kisshun
▬▬┤|T a i j u t s u
• Bruising Sky Leg
• Strong Arm
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Tsukino was born into the head family of the Kazuki clan and much was and is expected of her.She trained in the art of healing techniques from a young age.She was sent to the academy at thirteen and began her ninja training.Her parents weren't suprised when she told them she wanted to be a medical ninja.Her friend, now deceased, helped her train while she helped him.They have grew close over the years and Tsukino hopes to one day be the best ninja there is.
She graduated and went on mission for the first time.Tsukino was well prepared for the threats that would present themselves during the battle but her teammates were not and unfortunately died during the battle.Tsukino was scarred but that she would never let it happen again.She is now the genin of Konoha everyone loves of the village that helped her grow on her shinobi path.By many she is called the 'Moonlight beauty' for her ferocity in battle but beautiful appearance.She makes her father proud as she continues her path to the way of the shinobi.
I have edited the Things you have noted for me to edit. But I already have my Taijutsu at 0 meaning I can't learn any taijutsu styles or fighting styles. But am I allowed to learn taijutsu techniques, like the ones Ive already learned? If not I will edit my profile again and switch to Taijutsu as my main class.
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:47 pm
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:48 pm
Well what you can also do is change "learns taijutsu in less than one post" into "Learns an extra Taijutsu Style" (that isn't too advanced for someone who isn't' primarily a taijutsu-person) and still retain your classes as is. Then make the correct arrangements for your jutsu limitations.
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:48 pm
Redera Issun Sorry, I missed your post x.X
Fall: It's a nice template but you forgot to have jutsu limitations in your profile as well as the general (not main weapon) inventory, AC and Ryo, Missions, and some other stuff.
It's preferred if you can follow the guild's original template or at least include the entirety of things this one is lacking. He carries no other inventory
Also I am going to create a separate post in my own thready of a mission log, the link to which will be in his profile. There I will state what mission, how it went, what day it was assigned, how much Ryo I earned and how much AC I earned along with a link to said mission
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 6:54 pm
We're almost there : D
Hm, I can't tell much from what your limitation says. It could be easily misunderstood. Follow the original's template on that one; (because the numbers on the right would indicate that he's already learned them when it's not the case.)
Ninjutsu: 04/00
Taijutsu: 02/00
Bukijutsu: 01/00
Fall: Eh... Well, he's your character so alright.
As for you creating a separate post, I'd also assume that you're going to link it onto your character profile, yes? And I think you should include your AC and Ryo anyway by linking that too. Just include them in your profile, linking them to another area though is fine because we'd have the links to see should anything happen.
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 7:04 pm
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 7:05 pm
Redera Issun We're almost there : D
Hm, I can't tell much from what your limitation says. It could be easily misunderstood. Follow the original's template on that one; (because the numbers on the right would indicate that he's already learned them when it's not the case.)
Ninjutsu: 04/00
Taijutsu: 02/00
Bukijutsu: 01/00
Fall: Eh... Well, he's your character so alright.
As for you creating a separate post, I'd also assume that you're going to link it onto your character profile, yes? And I think you should include your AC and Ryo anyway by linking that too. Just include them in your profile, linking them to another area though is fine because we'd have the links to see should anything happen. Done
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 7:12 pm
Redera Issun Well what you can also do is change "learns taijutsu in less than one post" into "Learns an extra Taijutsu Style" (that isn't too advanced for someone who isn't' primarily a taijutsu-person) and still retain your classes as is. Then make the correct arrangements for your jutsu limitations. I edited it but I think Im having trouble with the jutsu limitations. I gave myself a 6 in ninjutsu and 2 in genjutsu( I added the genjutsu point I get from Medical class and the one I got from Ninjutsu class). Then I just put one in everything else. Hopefully that's right if not I'll change it. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 7:24 pm
Fall: Everything else is fine. Like I said, include the links on your profile so to complete the approval.
Tsukino: Well, you know you can in general have up to 2 or maybe 3 elements? If you just want water for your chakra element then you can learn six water ninjutsus. So giving yourself six ninjutsu's for that single element is right. But if you were to have two or three elements then you would simply multiply six by that number. For example: Element 1, Element 2 = 12 ninjutsus (under their own limitations.
Which would look like this; Element 1: ??/?? Element 2: ??/??
Does that make any sense? : O Sorry, Tsu, I should have been clearer, my fault.
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 7:41 pm
Redera Issun Fall: Everything else is fine. Like I said, include the links on your profile so to complete the approval.
Tsukino: Well, you know you can in general have up to 2 or maybe 3 elements? If you just want water for your chakra element then you can learn six water ninjutsus. So giving yourself six ninjutsu's for that single element is right. But if you were to have two or three elements then you would simply multiply six by that number. For example: Element 1, Element 2 = 12 ninjutsus (under their own limitations.
Which would look like this; Element 1: ??/?? Element 2: ??/??
Does that make any sense? : O Sorry, Tsu, I should have been clearer, my fault. That's ok, but even if you had explained it clearer the first time I still probably wouldn't have understood. XD Im a very slow learner. And is everything else ok?
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2011 7:49 pm
Tsu: DX -light bonk- Nah, I don't think so. : P It's just me. Anyway I see no other problems now, approved.~ Welcome back to SN~
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