EDIT: I wrote a question on the other page but It's gonna get buried now. Damn.
EDIT: eh I'll just repost it
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wrote rough draft for two chapters in morters story.
posted them up but remember that they are unfinished
give me your opinion on story only since I need to edit and make it more pleasing to read rather then just "he said then she said" and add a short fight scene between Morter and Oromis
Also since I plan to make these characters immortal to all but sickness and blade (Details will be worked out as we move on with morters story. So excited about this Idea I have been boiling for months thinking about it.)
anyway like I was saying I want Morter to fall in love with either Diana or Jessica.
Diana will have a split personality thing. whenever she holds a gun or weapon she becomes this master strategist on the battlefield but when she isn't she is a very kind and motherly women who is just infatuated with watermelons (originally it was blueberry's but after seeing my ex gf hug a watermelon I changed it out of funniness).
Diana may eventualy grow out of the little sister thing and start seeing morter as a guy rather then a brother.
Jessie already has a loveseed planted for Morter capable of growing into a relationship plant. She is strong, willful and capable enough to back her words with force. she is a tomboy who loves getting into mischief and picking on people she likes. She is a sickeningly expert shot with a sniper (able to shoot a pilot out of his jet without a scope)
Jessie has the childhood friend thing going on and they already have great chemistry.
Both bring good qualities to the table both are able to console him in their own different ways and both are more then capable of kicking his a** into shape if his character needs it.
This will be my first "Fan-fic" And I don't wanna ******** it up . I'm leaning towards Jessie but before I was leaning towards Diana.
I want a second opinion.
posted them up but remember that they are unfinished
give me your opinion on story only since I need to edit and make it more pleasing to read rather then just "he said then she said" and add a short fight scene between Morter and Oromis
Also since I plan to make these characters immortal to all but sickness and blade (Details will be worked out as we move on with morters story. So excited about this Idea I have been boiling for months thinking about it.)
anyway like I was saying I want Morter to fall in love with either Diana or Jessica.
Diana will have a split personality thing. whenever she holds a gun or weapon she becomes this master strategist on the battlefield but when she isn't she is a very kind and motherly women who is just infatuated with watermelons (originally it was blueberry's but after seeing my ex gf hug a watermelon I changed it out of funniness).
Diana may eventualy grow out of the little sister thing and start seeing morter as a guy rather then a brother.
Jessie already has a loveseed planted for Morter capable of growing into a relationship plant. She is strong, willful and capable enough to back her words with force. she is a tomboy who loves getting into mischief and picking on people she likes. She is a sickeningly expert shot with a sniper (able to shoot a pilot out of his jet without a scope)
Jessie has the childhood friend thing going on and they already have great chemistry.
Both bring good qualities to the table both are able to console him in their own different ways and both are more then capable of kicking his a** into shape if his character needs it.
This will be my first "Fan-fic" And I don't wanna ******** it up . I'm leaning towards Jessie but before I was leaning towards Diana.
I want a second opinion.
