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Branwen Uerch Lyr

PostPosted: Wed Jul 22, 2009 4:18 pm


My diviant art. http://beth-night.deviantart.com/

My photo bucket. http://s186.photobucket.com/albums/x152/kyan_starfire/


Be mindful my photo bucket has some bad avi art's I did a while ago. Sometimes I like to give crappy avi art. ><
PostPosted: Wed Jul 22, 2009 11:25 pm


ok so i went onto your deviant art account and the stuff looked ok. the first one im gonna critique is aqua [http://beth-night.deviantart.com/art/Aqua-130378082] well i give u major props on the dress, it looks nice. but i have to say the neck looks kinda big compared to the rest of the body. Also, the sholders look two different shapes. for the look i think your going for the one on the left is probably the better shape of the two. Another thing is that the upper arms look a bit awkward and the way the arm on the right looks, the elbow is way to high. now as far as the wings go, one looks smaller then the other[left one is smaller] but i always do that so dont beat ur self up on that one.
now onto the face. the nose and mouth look good its just the hair that is annoying me [no offence]. the only reason i say that is because on the left the eye is fully covered and on the right the eye is half way covered but u can still see her whole eye. so a way u can fix that is to just decide one way or the other way.

onto the next drawing X3. this one is branwen [http://beth-night.deviantart.com/art/Branwen-129019445] ill start off at the face. you see here u covered like the top part of the eyes on both sides which looks good. what i recomend is to try making the nose a bit smaller. you dont have to draw the whole line up if u dont want to [but by all means u can if u want :3] u can just draw the tip of the nose [looks kinda like this except more rounded: < ] also, wen drawing the eyse, you have to realize that in real life a third eye of the same size as the other two eyes can fit right in the middle. ive heard that so many times.
Now onto the body. again the next is a bit too wide but the sholders look good :]. the wings look good tooo. only thing i have to recomend for them is to finish drawing it at the bottom right of the wing :] everything else looks good. i love the effects you used in the background by the way :]

last drawing...then i need to go to bed X]. its truth comes in many forms [http://beth-night.deviantart.com/art/Truth-Comes-In-Many-Forms-129783902]. well i ahve to say i disagree with you with the big head thing. its looks good actually :]. [im one for drawing people in side view personally] so onto the critiquing! the only thing i recomend for the face is to move the eyes down a bit. that might be giveing the feel of the head being to big. the eyse should be both level to the ears and should b right about where the nose begins to go out. also, since the girl is crying, i think there would be more then just one stream coming out over her eyes [unless u only want one stream] now onto the body. i have to things to recomend. the sholders/arms are way to small. i think it should be about the width of the neck [i could be wrong with that but idk] also. the way her back looks make her look like she is growing a hunch back X3. just make it a bit more alined with the back of the neck and itll look good. Other then that everything looks good.

well i hope i helped you! keep up the good work! mrgreen

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