[If you're going to give honest critique, I'd prefer it on the deviation itself or via a PM. Of course, this is a bit of an inconvenience, so feel free to post it here P: )

Manatees by a Raspberry Patch

Lyricism is nothing to this
A kiss on the lips,
And a pull at the gown

What emotion wonts our action
But lust?

I hand him the coffee
A prize of a tense morning ritual--
Smiles, lingering hazes, laughs at the sudden shock that the liquid is hot.
Recalls of mornings before this.

And I want.

The dark disguise could not come fast enough;
Our friends...must not know.

Danger is in the eye of the beholder.