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Blood Rose, a story i'm writing. Would you read it? |
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Bagels |
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Posted: Sun Jun 01, 2008 10:41 am
Just tell us the painful things that have happened to you
Example: I fell through a coffee table(It's actually the truth)
Let's begin!
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Posted: Sun Jun 01, 2008 6:42 pm
I road my friends bike off a cliff into a trench. *it hurt but I ended up being okay*
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Posted: Sun Jun 01, 2008 6:47 pm
I fell on my rollerblades a few years ago and really cut my knee up...I still have the scar.
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Posted: Mon Jun 02, 2008 1:43 pm
it was nighttime and the floor was wet, I took a step off my bed, then 'WHOOSH' my foot flied forward and bashed against a nail sticking out of the floor. Bleed for a little while, hurt like hell...
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Posted: Mon Jun 02, 2008 3:18 pm
... I stayed out in the sun for to long and Ended up getting a seccond degree sunburn all over my body... and it dident even result in a tan! Just ended up being as white as ever.
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Posted: Mon Jun 02, 2008 3:31 pm
I was playing on a playground, my age was 8. I was running forward but facing backwards, I then faced forward and 'SMACK' right into pole, by the time I was in the nurses office my face was comlpetely covered in blood...
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Posted: Mon Jun 02, 2008 3:38 pm
In March, I was on a cruise. I was in port at St. Lucia and was on a tour where they gave out free fruit. Anyway, there was this really friggin' obese lady blocking the garbage can. I said "Excuse me", she didn't listen. So I went around her, threw out my garbage, and WHOOPS, I fell onto a rock. I got a big 2-inch cut and several little cuts. The most ironic thing, though, was the same fat lady was in the same elevator as me two days later. I raised my arm to see how the cut was, and she says: "Oh, you poor thing! How did that happen?" I gave her the death stare. Are you kidding?, I thought.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 1:25 pm
I finished my prologue a while ago to my story, Blood Rose, and well I feel like posting it... whee
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 1:46 pm
I ran my knee into the corner of a square pillar once. That hurt a lot.
Where are you going to post your story? I'm really interested in reading it.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 1:59 pm
I'm posting it here...just got to type it up 3nodding
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 2:05 pm
oh I see.
There was this other time that I got a realy bad burn on the back of my thighs and I couldn't sit down properly for like two weeks and I had summer school. razz
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 2:16 pm
I'm going to post it in two parts, here's the first part
BLOOD ROSE PROLOGUE PT#1
Walking up to Jane, who just happened to be the owner of the Crimson Flower, "Should I really be buying her these? I mean honestly I could do better" thought Bill. Still he lazily asked her how much the bunch of roses in his hands would cost. "So...umm...how much will these cost?", "Ooh!, I see you choose the liveliest bunch...that'll be...$15 dollars please" she replied, "$15 dollars!" he yelled, she softly replied "Well we do need to keep this small business running", calmly he replied "Okay". After paying her he opened the metallic doors and left. He turned around when he got to the sidewalk,and looked at the store. He looked at the reflecting metallic doors, then switched his glance to the clean see-through window, watching the Crimson roses slowly swaying from side-to-side because of the cool air conditioning inside. He panned his view to the big sign above the door, it was covered in vines, but that was part of the design, it read; Crimson Rose. The building was a two-year-old brick building, you could cracks on the walls here and there. Vines rose up on the walls, as if they were trying to reach the heavens, a few flowers were blooming on the vines. Slowly he turned away, roses in hand, and walked back home to his wife. A doorbell rang throughout the house, "I'm coming!" yelled out Sherry. She placed the knife, wet from cutting vegetables, on the table and walked into the living room. She walks up to the door and unlocks it, she slowly opens it to see who it is. "Oh! it's you, I'm getting lunch ready, are you hungry?", "No not really" he replied, she asks, "What's that behind your back?", "Just something for you" he replied. He took the roses and showed them to her, her expression changed from happy to embarrassed. "Oh...you shouldn't have!" she giggled, "But I did" he replied casually. He walked into the house, and closed the door behind him. "I'll go put these beauties in some water" she said walking over to an empty vase, she filled it with water and put the Crimson Roses in, "Ahh...that's better" she said whispering to herself. She walked back to the kitchen and continued to cut up the vegetables. Slowly he untied his shoes and took them off, he stood up and walked up the stairs to his room.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 2:30 pm
nvm...I'm going to do it in three parts, here's part two!
BLOOD ROSE PROLOGUE PT#2
He walked into the bedroom and opened the door, slowly he went to the bureau and opened the top drawer. He took out a change of clothes, and placed them on the bed. He took his clothes off and laid them on the chair. It took him a few minutes to finish changing. A low growl is heard behind him, "Huh?! what's that?" he said worringly turning around. "Oh it's just you" he said petting his dog. He put his slippers on, and finally went back downstairs. He sniffed the air, smelling the sweet scent of lemon pie. Walking into the kitchen he says, "Looks like dessert's going to be fun tonight", she replies, "I'm glad you like it". Sherry had finished preparing lunch about four minutes later. "Honey lunch is ready!" she yelled. He walked into the kitchen and sat down at the neatly made dining table. They finished having lunch about an hour and a half later(they loved to converse). He walks up the stairs holding Sherry in his arms, he walks into the bedroom and places her down. He shoo's the dog out of the room and closes the door behind him. He scrathes and barks at the door, but Bill yells at him to stop. He goes on down the stairs and lays down on the couch. A rustling of leaves is heard from the kitchen, he starts to whimper a little, then he growls. A shadow is casted on the wall and moves toward the dog, in curiosity he moves toward it. A loud whimper, then yelp can be heard from the kitchen, alarming Sherry, and Bill. They rush down the stairs, covering ther naked, and partially wet bodies with a blanket, a slicing sound, and blood splatter can be heard from the kitchen. Slowly they walk together into the kitchen, and see a pile of blood, from their dog. She screams and something sharp grabs her legs. It yanks her onto the floor and drags her away, but she grabs a hold of Bill's leg dragging him with her. She was still screaming, but as soon as they reached the cupboards, it cut them in half.
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 2:59 pm
BLOOD ROSE PROLOGUE PT#3
Blood gushed everywhere, and slowly the shadow, and rustling went away. The neighbor heard the screaming, so she called the police and went over to see if anyone was okay. Walking into the house she asked, "Is anyone here?, are you alright?". She heard a rustling in the kitchen "Huh?!", she slowly walked into the kitchen and saw the blood stains. It grabbed her neck and continuously threw her against the wall. Her head bleed profusely, her body fell to the ground and was dragged away. The police walked in and saw all the blood, immediately they condemned the place. They found a vase with bloody flowers in it, nest to it was a flower bag that was labeled "Crimson Rose". That made Jane a suspect of murder, but when they got there, there was no one there, and for some reason all the roses were dead. There was no money in the cash register, and no fingerprints anywhere, the mystery of the Blood Rose was still at large.
END So...what do you think?
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Posted: Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:03 pm
I once sat on a big metal seesaw with a friend and he decided to jump of while I peaked resulting in me smashing with my upperteeth on it and my underlip inbetween the seesaw and upperteeth resulting in a serious cut and headache, It was so hard I did not even noticed that my lip was penetrated, bleeding and that my front teeth chipped only when my friend noticed it I went to the bathroom(wich was closeby) and saw a huge stream of blood coming from my lip, soon a teacher came with a towell and escorted me to the teachers their room in wich they wondered whom knew where the local hospital was and should drive me, when there they had to sedate my lip with two syringes... that hurt more than the smack! even worse they couldn't take out all the chips of my teeth and of the paint quickly enough so they had to sedate me again, OUCH! then they sewed it. later on I had to go to the local dentist to get him look at my teeth he found out the smack was so hard that I had to get a root canal on both upper frontteeth wich also is VERY painfull and I did.
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