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Oh don't be so harsh on yourself, they are all very lovely.
Your lineart is very thick and dynamic, I like it when anime/manga artists use more dynamic lineart than just thin shoujo lines all the time. XD However, I can see that it's not consistent the whole way through. Try drawing your lines with a single stroke instead of using multiple strokes (for example, the girl's right puffy arm sleeve in Scan 014 clearly has at least 3 lines). You look like you did the lineart on these on a digital program, but I highly recommend practicing drawing lineart with traditional mediums. You can learn to draw with a single stroke just by a simple ball point pen.

There's not much I can say about the first one (the colored one), and I think it's beautiful. Sorry if it brings up bad memories. XP