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I'm submitting one of these pictures to the art literary magazine at my school, so naturally I'd like some criticism on the picture.

Though I'd mostly like criticism on the coloring because I know her proportions are off. (It would probably all look a lot better if her hips weren't so wide and her torso was just a bit shorter. Though it would be an epic fail to try and fix that now. Dx )

Sadly my scanner is less than half the size of the original picture so about 60% of this picture was cut off from the scan. So I'm definitely going to submit the original drawing to the magazine.

Edit;; Yes, her hair is meant to be over exaggerated.



Though I'm either going to submit the picture above or this picture:



Or this picture:



I'm not sure which on I should submit so help with that is loved and so is criticism.

i like the 3rd the best, but all the rest are still nicely done =)

I'd say to submit the first one.
It is much more dynamic and complete, so it will stand out against other submissions.

I do love the profile and expression of the second one, but its too centered on the page to be dynamic, and I feel that compaired to the first one its a little boring.

The third one needs some serious compositional work (in my opinion), and I highly reccomend not sending it in.

But, they are all lovely drawings, though, and if you put in as much attention to the colored details (like hair) to the first one as you did to the second, I'm sure it will be a sure fire entry~

Of the three you've got up I'd have to say that the 2nd image probably looks the most polished and finished. It's got a nice art deco feel to.
But your best bet is most likely your 1st image. It's a real eye grabber. Yeah, the anatomy looks a little off, but it's kinda of a deliberate off. It's just how the style appears and I don't think it really detracts from the overall affect of the picture.

That being said, I believe the hair could definitely use some more definition to it. I mean it's huge. Make it pop! Don't be afraid to throw some darker colors in there!
You are using markers right? Try playing around with the colors a little on another sheet. That red/pink hair, for instance, might look good with a few brown highlights.

As for your last image; I think looks like an excellent character design but just doesn't catch my attention like the other 2.

I like your little side notes about light source. X3
Have you tried scanning your pictures in sections and then editing them in photoshop? It's a bit of work but it's usually is worth the effort.