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[ okeyday ]
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PostPosted: Fri Feb 13, 2009 10:04 pm


Bonjour!

So, started this today, but the face looks mighty fake.
._. I'm thinking it's the eyes? Not sure.
And then does it look like she's looking up?
Cause it sort of looks like she just has a fat jaw...
Bleh.


But any critique would be loved and appreciated!
Thanks ^_^


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PostPosted: Sat Feb 14, 2009 11:35 am


Jesus Christ Okey, you got so much better from last time I saw you. Your choice of skin tones is much more vibrant and your shading became even more amazing. heart

The nose, I think, has the most problems. The ball of the nose isn't very pronounced, it blends together with the nostrils too well. Maybe also try to make the mouth-line stand out less? You could also try putting in some texture on the skin, like skin pores and whatnot.

There's not so much to say from me, because photo-realism is far from my specialty. It's beautiful so far, however. ^^

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[ okeyday ]
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 14, 2009 2:47 pm


@ Kupocake:
First off, your siggy made me LOL so hard xD Ahahaa. Made my day! And oh I see what you mean. I'll fix that tonight when I go back to the drawing xD And thanks! ._. And I don't feel like I've gotten better @_@ I haven't drawn anything for fun that was outside of art class (with a demon for a teacher! Gah she's evil.)
PostPosted: Sat Feb 14, 2009 8:46 pm


Salut!

I think it's great! :3 But maybe blend the colours on the forehead a bit more? I think the shadow is too prominent. And maybe add...eyebrows? o.o
XD

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[ okeyday ]
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 15, 2009 7:11 am


Candy Cane Bunny
Salut!

I think it's great! :3 But maybe blend the colours on the forehead a bit more? I think the shadow is too prominent. And maybe add...eyebrows? o.o
XD


It's not finished, so of course I'd add eyebrows ._. and the forehead isn't done either, and most of it will be covered by the bangs, so xD
PostPosted: Tue Feb 17, 2009 12:36 am


Well, it's a wip, so whatever. But the weird eyebrows (or lack of) makes her look like a plaster bust. And...the nose shape is a bit strange? Asians do have small or flat noses most of the time but still...it looks a bit off. It's real awesome though.

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BlackRose11111

PostPosted: Tue Feb 17, 2009 2:50 am


Wow this is good.
If I were my art teacher i would say the shading around the nose... and the shading that sets up the bone structure on the cheekbones, so probably under the eyes.

Although I think once you add the hair and details it will look just wonderful smile
PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 7:21 pm


I'm supposing your using Photoshop for this, and as such, I would suggest as towards the pores, a noise layer and use of a displacement map would probably be the best. (making a gray scale image from the shading on this image would mostly work right probably. You'd have to mess a little with it to be perfect though.)

Just a suggestion of course. Seems like a displacement map with a noise filter and a few layer styles would work wonders.... but I've only used displacement maps for a few very small things..... O-o... I think I'm rambling....

Anyway, as stated the nose looks wrong (probably the ball like suggested earlier.) and I think that they eyes are fine. They look to be looking off to our left, her right, and not up nor down. Should be a good piece when your done, and looks great so far.

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