Poetry--critques requested

[daximn]

This is one of my newest poems, we've been talking a lot about Darfur in class and i thought I'd write a poem about it...

"Darfur"

It's like it's starting
all over again
the way they treat those
men
and women
children too
dying under the
sky
no longer blue
but stained with
the blood
of the
innocent
men
and women
children too

spilled by the soldiers
who now forgot
what once happened
the holocaust
killing the same
raiding the shops
parading the streets
in a destructive way
destroying all who
try
and stand
in their way

they will not last
to see tomorrow
without the help
of you
and I
to stand up
against
those who take
pleasure
in seeing them
die

And then i have some Haikus...

"Untitled"
Listen, listen now
the wind will whisper to you
and the forest speak

"Untitled"
winds caressing my
face, their genital touch will not
ever leave my mind

"Untitled"
staring forever
up past everything, into
true oblivion  

[AnekoYakushi]

I don't have any critiques really but your poetry is very lovely. The Dardur one is very powerful and has a lot of emotion in it. I also like the style you wrote it in. Your Haiku are lovely as well and aren't just some random phrases thrown together to make them and I like the imagery in them as well. Very lovely job and thanks for sharing them ^^ heart  

[Arayza]

I love the haikus ^-^  

[Silverpyro19]

Very nice. Intriguing. Most long poems can't keep my attention but yours did.

I'm a little concerned about the "genital touch" in the second haiku though lol