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opiel16

PostPosted: Fri Jul 03, 2009 3:01 pm


I've got some specific points I'd like help with, but I'm also looking for any general critique you've got going.
Stuff I want to know most;
-the body from this angle; can you tell that she's sat leaning up against a wall without a background? Would a background clarify, or is the anatomy (or folds in top) too off for that?
-Drawing hair from above. And are the hilights in the right place?
-Does the blood look suitable? (considering the colouring style)
-The folds where the edges of the skirt sit on the floor
-foreshortening on upper arms, is it too much or too little?
-Anything else, I'll have that too.
Well, here's the piccy!
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There's a larger version on my deviantart, same name, if it'll help.
PostPosted: Sat Jul 04, 2009 9:29 am


more shading were the body bends, so you can tell were her legs start and were her stomach is

Monqueys

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opiel16

PostPosted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 2:22 pm


Good point sweatdrop
She just sorta smudges... I'll address that immideatly 3nodding
PostPosted: Wed Jul 15, 2009 5:10 pm


Speaking of smudges, perhaps you should smudge the highlights and shades in the hair a bit? Unless it's your style, since on a second thought, a messier colouring might fit the art? (usually I would be more firm on the spot, but I've seen good artists pull off with a messy style and make it look awesome)
I completely adore that shirt, how you coloured it as well as the pattern.
Perhaps a very simple background with three lines meting in a corner and as much shading as your taste can stand? If you put on really heave shading it just might add to the mood.
(although I'm not one to speak of backgrounds - I avoid drawing them to every extent XP )

abandoned_nr_5448214

Gambino Gaian


Amaya Himura X Zero Kiryu

PostPosted: Tue Jul 21, 2009 4:21 am


make hands a little bigger. (in reality hands are as big as your head)
PostPosted: Tue Jul 21, 2009 5:51 am


I don't know if I am the only one notice this but her breast are rather.. odd. xP

winter rat

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