Girl

[chocoval]

To make it more writing style
Chocoval was traveling around the Canyon with Monodramon when he saw something start flicking around. he approached it and took that piece of paper. He open it and it says:

Poetry I made during my free time biggrin
if you like it please rate in the Arena section 3nodding

Girls....
you're all beautiful....
That's a fact that nobody can change....
You're one of the masterpiece that was created....
You're not some toys that boys can played with...
you're priceless....
As a matter of fact, not even God can buy your beauty...

Tell me if you like it or not biggrin
Comment are appreciated

 

[khkhjkh]

It is pretty good.  

[Jin_of_the_thunder]

it could do with a little more poetic imagery. i mean its just basically. girls, you rock. i just feel it needs to have more depth. play with irony or something. i just think it needs to have a more interesting message.