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This is my first attempt to do a line art with a mouse on the computer. This took me a while actually cause I can't seem to control the mouse the way I want. But I plan to color this in the near future but before I start I wanted some advice C&C on this first. So what do you guys think?





EDIT: This is my colored version. I took your guy's advice and changed some stuff as you can see above. Thanks again! It really did make the picture look better. I'm not too good at coloring yet since I don't do it very often but I hope this one looks alright.

Thanks a lot to you too Zan, your' critiques has always been very insightful for me. heart

It looks quite good and the lines look smooth. The shape of her arm in front looks weird, but I guess shading might solve that problem.

The eyes look like they might not be lined up properly. I don't know the first thing about braiding, but those braids look very nice. If the braids are in front of her ears, I'd have them go over the face a little; if they're behind the ears, I'd have the ears showing. I'm not sure about the intended angle, so I can't really say much about that. The way the sleeve on the arm to the left stretches over the chest a bit seems a little weird to me. To me, it looks like that upper arm is trying to be both behind and in front of the breasts at the same time... I'd personally have it more evidently only seem one way.

But it looks like a good picture overall. It's motivated me a little to start practising again... where does my time go?!

Very good! Waaay better than I ever was with a mouse. I also loved the technique you used for your lineart.

I think the colouring on the hair looks particularly good. I don't think you should've made the entire line art purple, though. I would've just left it all black and maybe changed it on certain parts of the sweater and hat (where it wouldn't mess with the other parts of the drawing)... Though I'm not familiar with Photoshop at all, so I dunno if there's an easy way to do that or not.

For her pose, I think she looks more like she'd be leaning over a fence, counter, or something similar. When I first saw the line art, I thought it was either supposed to be something like that or that she was perhaps taking her top off. It seems like she's supposed to be lying down, though. I have no idea how to do it... I drew something in a very similar pose before, but it didn't work out for me. I suppose the chest might be closer to the ground, but I really don't know and need to research it more.

Light source... it seems like it might be from where she's looking at, and it also looks like it's coming from that shining star in the background. I think that star is applying to her hat while the source in front of/above her seems to be applying to most everything else... Or maybe it's the dark shoulders that I have a problem with; if the light from above/behind is strong enough to make the top of her hat brightened, then I'd maybe make the top of her everything brightened (unless it's under something that would cast a shadow).
I dunno, the colouring/shading seems good overall, but something seems amiss.

I would have personally shaded her right forearm differently. Here's a picture showing how I'd have done it (just a quick MS Paint thing):

As your picture is currently, I don't think the shape of her arm is made evident enough... or maybe I got the wrong idea here. Well, that's how it looked to me, anyways. Otherwise, I'd give that arm less curve on the top of the sleeve... I guess when going from point A to point B, gravity would make the top of [whatever loose thing you've drawn] more straight.

Well, these are my views. The picture looks quite nice overall.

looks awesome just wish the shadowing was a bit darker to give it a little more contrast but the line work and coloring in the clothing is pretty spot on. Way to go can't wait to see more if you do post again. ^^