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 Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2011 10:49 pm
Yes. Long poem. I apologize.
A poem I wrote a year ago... With modifications. Critique would be heart 'd
The sun has streaked a halo through clouds
Like angel arms, reaching down.
Bringing hope to a desperate world
While Evil sweeps the land.
Sinister storm clouds come rolling in,
And so the battle does begin;
The battle of the Divine.
As Rain and Sky fiercely spar,
The Moon and Sun attack
Cruel Demons shall beat at the pure Angels
While Angels shall purify the land.
And so, the battles continue without end
'Til they step in; the good, the hope--
The Seven who are One
So just as quickly as He came,
Evil hastily retreats.
And so, Justice reclaims the land
'Til evil returns once again.
As Good comes, so Good goes
What comes shall leave, once again.
And so Justice reclaimed the land
'Til Evil returned once again.
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Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2011 3:40 am
Lovely and gratifyingly exciting to read. mrgreen
Can't think of anything that is bad about it to critique. sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2011 6:14 pm
Angelic iGirl Lovely and gratifyingly exciting to read. mrgreen
Can't think of anything that is bad about it to critique. sweatdrop Thank you!
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Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2011 8:49 pm
That was absolutely wonderful. Intriguing to read. c:
The title captures one's eye, and it all flows. Your use of words were rather clever.
I'd say you did an awesome job ^_^
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Posted: Tue Aug 30, 2011 9:28 am
Atomic Poppy That was absolutely wonderful. Intriguing to read. c: The title captures one's eye, and it all flows. Your use of words were rather clever. I'd say you did an awesome job ^_^ Thanks! I've had little luck with titles, so I was trying to make sure people would see this one razz
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Posted: Mon Sep 12, 2011 11:34 am
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Posted: Mon Sep 12, 2011 12:15 pm
I really liked the poem!! ♥ I do not have much else to say.
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Posted: Mon Sep 12, 2011 3:18 pm
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Posted: Mon Sep 12, 2011 3:19 pm
buckwolvhoosier I really liked the poem!! ♥ I do not have much else to say. Thanks so much!
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Posted: Mon Sep 12, 2011 8:22 pm
Seastormjt buckwolvhoosier I really liked the poem!! ♥ I do not have much else to say. Thanks so much! You're welcome. ^^
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