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Poems and Random Thoughts
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So much blue
So much blue it will drown you
have to break away from the blue
need a drop of red

A cold press of metal to the skin
red brakes through and you can breath again
Suddenly the blue is stained
with a flow of blood you come unchained

your fingers become cold
the warm red floods out tenfold
you close your eyes
your peace out and inside

Suddenly a shreak goes out
your eyes come open but words, you are without
standing there is a boy
from his hands drops a toy

Tears quickly stream down his face
in his eyes you see your disgrace
total peace comes over the
but what you left behind, who you did it to, was me


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  • User Comments: [1]
    Spyceh
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    Wed Jul 08, 2009 @ 02:58am


    A few spelling mistakes again.
    The brake you are using literally means a brake like in a car.
    You should be using break.
    "total peace comes over the"
    the doesn't fit there.
    I'm assuming you meant to put them.
    Last line is a bit confusing in this one as well :/


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