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Here is a random poem I made off the top of my head. It isn't too good, but it's okay at least, right?

To Love But Never Give Up
By: A Fading Image

He wanders the streets late at night,
Eternally searching for someone to fight.
The young man approaches the bigger guy,
He jabs his fingers in his eye.
The large guy wails and smacks the man,
Sends him flying into a trash can.
The young man coughs forth little blood,
With distant memories his mind does flood.
His sweetheart leaves with words of advice,
"I need someone stronger, not someone nice."
He tried his hardest just to fail,
He wondered why they say "Love will prevail."
He closed his eyes and slipped away,
Never again to join the fray.
He learned his lesson of love's harsh blade,
But still he wishes for love to be made.
Eternally searching withstanding the pain,
It will all be worth the love to gain.

It's a little different, and I don't usually do poetry. I just felt like it, I suppose.....






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Queen of the Metal Sporks
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commentCommented on: Thu Jul 12, 2007 @ 04:21pm
From a poetry critics standpoint, yes it is good but the meter (beat, etc) is a little awkward int he middle.

From a friends standpoint, I love it.


commentCommented on: Fri Jul 13, 2007 @ 04:37pm
Um...no offense but I find it kinda sidistic...well written though.



Green Dragon Rider
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Lilly_Candy
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commentCommented on: Sun Aug 05, 2007 @ 04:38pm
good pome 3nodding smile
alittle skerry. burning_eyes
Lilly Candy


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