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chappy 4
i know it starts out the same aslast chappy if any one has some suggestions as to how to chang ethe ast chappy just tell me

Zi work with a start. Some had drop-ped something and from the sounds of it fairly close to the bed she was in. She work in confusion, this isn't my room where am I. She slowly came to relaize that it was in Ton's room.She sat up in the bed and looked toward the oragins of the sound. Ton's mother had dropped a very old china tea kettle and it had crashed sending shards of china all cross the room. she was also rushing to pick up the peices when Zi heard foot steps. Ton came walking up behind his mother.
"Mum, why don't you get a maid to do this? And you go get cleaned up?." Ton's mother stopped cleaning and nodded as she walked away. "Good morning Zi. Hope you slept well." He said softly as he stepped around the broken china and to her side. He sat next to her on the bed and wrapped a arm around her shoulders.
" i should go. I should of left last night, I'm so sorry." Zi pulled and grabed her belongings and started to leave when she felt a hand encricle her wrist. Ton let go of my wrist now! she screamed in her head although she knew told heard her. he didnt listen though instead he pulled her onto his lap and held her. Thoughts from the previous nights came flooding back to her in a wave of anguish, She cried again for what felt like the millionth time, she sat there and cried on Ton's shoulder. He started to cry with her only slightly.
"don't go please don't go just yet."Ton said barely above a whisper he held her tighter to ensure that she wouldn't leave him just yet.'
"Ton I have to you know nickoli can"t do anything by himself. He is going to be married soon there are arrangements and plans i have to finish before then." Ton smiled slightly as she said this.He thought it funny how she would fret over her brothers wedding.
"You know plan weddings does not suit you. No matter what happens at the wedding I will always see you as the girl that tried to go in her fathers place to the war even though you were only eight years of age." Ton whispered as he loosened his grip on her. She moved off of him to get all her things together.She smiled at the memory of her trying to go to war with her wooden sword,and how, as her father left for the last,Ton held her to him as her tried to keep her from running after her father. She also remembered that,that was the last time she ever saw her father,he died latter taht day soon after he joined up with his burgade.Zi pushed the memory out off her mind and continued to get her things."I'm going to come with you, Zi" Ton said to break the silence.
"what do you mean come with me? I'm not going any where." she turned to look at Ton his normally dancing friery eyes were now clam and almost pure red. Zi gasped, and went to Ton shaking his shoulder to try to wake him from the trance.His trances had a tendancy to wreek havoc on his mind if he stayed in one too long."Ton,Ton answer me! Ton! Ton wake up!" She screamed this as though she was about to die.Tears stung her eyes once more but she refused to let them fall. she shock his shoulders even harder but he still would not wake. She was at a loss she had no clue how long he had been in the trance. She had to shock him out of it soon before it did major damage to not only him but to her and the whole village. Red lines of fire engery started to swrill around him. She didn't have much time left so she did some thing drastic with out thinking. She closed her eyes and pressed her lips against his in a gentle kiss.She still felt the fire enery rising and collecting around him for a minute then it disperessed as he woke for the trance. She tried to pull back form him but something was stopping her. His hand was placed at the base of her head holding her to him as he returned her kiss. She paniced for a secound as she was trying to understand what he was doing,what she had started. He released her before she had a chance to answer the questions running threw her mind."I'm sorry"she mummbled as she quickly pulled away from him.She grabbed her things and quickly headed for the door.
" You're not the one that should have to applogize. I am. Zi,look at me." he went over to her and spun her around so that she was facing him. she kept her head down so that she wouldn't have to look at him. She was ashamed, he was three years older then her, he was known as a man in the village and she was yet a child. She knew the rules this kinda thing was frowned upon.She just ruined not only her life but his and his families.He put his finger under her chin and lifted it so that she was looking into his eyes."Zi, I'm sorry. i know you were just trying to help me. I shouldn't have acted like that.I'm very sorry Zi' He closed his eyes and let go of her.
Zi grabed her stuff and ran from the room.She went to the stable grabbed her horse that was already saddled for her. She jumped on its back and coaxed it into a gallop and soon to a run. She wanted nothing more but to go back to Ton but she knew she couldn't. If any one ever found out about this they would both be shunned from the village and so would their families. that was a chance she was not willing to take.She had made up her mind, she would leave the village that night. When she got to her house she jumped off her horse not even bothering to unsadle it. she ran into her small room at the back of the house. IT consisted of only a bed and a small dresser. Zi grabed her rucksack and started throwing clothing and other need accerories into the bag. the last thing she grabed out of the room was her mothers jewerly box, it was the only thing she had from her birth mother. The box had a insription on it that read Calena Frianariy. The box was also a fire like color. on the font of it was a lock, Zi kept the key around her neck. On the bottom of the box was a picture of a two tailed wolf with the tips of its ear tails and its paws were flames of red fire. Ever sence Zi was little she always wondered what the meaning of the wolf was. She knew there was something precous of her mother's in the box but she never dared open it. That is till now.
Zi sat down on the bed and took the key from her neck. With the box placed on her lap she slowly unlocked the box. She held her breath as she heard the click that signafied that the box was open. she slowly opened the box to see a red-gold colored book, a gold necklace with the black and red wolf as the pedant,a small dager that had a jeweled hilt the colors of the jewels dancing like fire and the blade was in scribbed in a language she did not understand Friam cas kalan,under all of this there were 3 pictures one of her mother when she was around Zi's age, One of her mother standing infornt of a stone building with in older man, and the last one was torn it was her mother kneeling holding a younger version of Zi in one arm her other arm holding what looks to be another person but Zi couldn't tell because that part of the picture was missing. Zi picked up the picture of her mother she almost exactly like Zi black hair tied up in a ponytail with some shorter strands falling infornt of her eyes. Her eyes were not the same shade of black as Zi's though they seemed to be a much darker version of Ton's eyes the way the colors danced making them look like black flames. She was not a very tall person but she seemed to have the air of some one no one would mess with. She was wearing a simple black floor length renassnce style dress.
Zi took the picture and tucked it into her boot putting the rest of the stuff back in the box. She then slipped the box into her bag and walked out of the room grabing her sword,bow and quiver as she went. She went to her parents room and opened the chest in the corner of the room. She pulled out her fathers sword and three of his most prized dagers.She then clipped both her sword and her fathers sord to her belt one below the other, WIth the dagers she slid one into the fold of her thick leather boots and teh other two were wrapped in a sheet and placed into her bag the last thing she did was go into her mothers chest dug down to the bottom and pulled out the very same black dress her mother wore in the picture Zi had tucked into her boot. Zi then slowly tuck this in the rucksack.Zi then threw her quiver over her sholder so it laid across her back and picked up her surpisingly, realitivly empty rucksack that held her few poessions.Next she went into the kitchen cabbinet and grabed a few apples,a bag of dried meat, and a water cantine.she put the apples and meat into a tried bag and put it into her rucksack. The last thing she retrived from a small drawer in the corner chest was a small bag of gold coins her lifes savings. tieing this to her belt she got up simotanously pulling her cloak around her shoulders and went out to where she left her horse. She tied the rusack to the back of the saddle and was about to mount when she relaized she forgot to get beding. She quickly ran inside grabed some flint that she shoved in her pocket and grabed some of the wool blankets they used during winter. She then again went back out to the horse threw the blankets over the horse right behind the saddle and tried them to the sadle so that would not fall off. After this she mounted and ugred the horse up the road toward the village gates pulling the hood of her cloak up so it hide her face from any on look she would pass.
When she reached the gates she turned back and looked at her village one last time. After a few secounds she truned her back on the village knowing she would never be allowed back this movement signifyed her final farewell to the village of Farnamn and the people who lived there. She coaxed the horse into a full run.She did dnot look back even once as she raced along the path that led away form the village, her home, and her friends. She felt tears sting her eyes but she would not let them fall vowing that never again would she be the girl that sat and cried instead of getting up to fight. From that day on she vowed to never be seen as a weak little girl but as a strong indepent woman just like her mother had before her. Zi smiled as she watched the road ahead of her as it led her to a new life away from the people that orpressed her.






User Comments: [2]
corvettes4life
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Thu Aug 09, 2007 @ 01:48pm


you coulod have changed the begining by just having her wake up instead of waking up to a pot smashing


in death we live
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Sat Aug 11, 2007 @ 02:05am


i could but then i have to rewrite ton entrance


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