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My Story Part one: The begining

Jace walked out into the nice cool air. He was wearing a normal pair of Jeans, and his favorite sweatshirt. In that sweatshirt he kept his gun and a few other tricks. He had just walked out of the office when he was greeted by his partner Amber. “So do we have a job to do here?” She asked. Jace took a moment to look at his partner, she was wearing jeans and a red shirt but on her back there was a case on her back full of her belongs and tools of the trade, her weapons. Jace responded to Amber’s question, “yes there seems to be a lot of killings go on around here, the villagers believed it has been done by death himself.” “Oh” Amber said “that is odd. What kind of person would believe that they are the Grim Reaper?” “I don’t know” responded Jace “He must be crazy though.”

While Amber and Jace were walking down the path to there hotel, Jace was thinking about when he first met Amber. He was young back then and reckless. He was going to kill himself if it wasn’t for her. Yes that was the day when he met her and him. They all became good friends and soon decided to register and become a Tomaki, a team that fights for the rights of the people. But then he betrayed Amber and him, He left them both for Dead. So now their team was down to 2 which wasn’t good. He will never forgive him.

“We will have to wait for nightfall” Jace said, “For that is when he will come out.” “Ok,” Amber said, “I am going to take a nap” and in a few short moments she was asleep. Jace looked patiently out the window and let his eyes stare out into the distance and he slowly fell into a deep sleep. He was running towards Amber, she had just been shot, and when he got to her he saw him there. “You know you are too nice.” BANG. Jace woke up sweating and noticed it was night.

Amber and Jace were now in the forest on the far reaches of town. “Where is he?” Amber asked. “I am not sure.” Said Jace. He then opened his mind to his surroundings, he heard Amber’s thoughts, She was tired again -_-, But then he heard another’s thoughts he was thinking how much fun he was going to have killing these 2 strangers. Jace yelled at Amber “Look out!” Amber was able to duck just in time, for a scythe had almost cut off her head and then it disappeared into the shadows. “Ha ha so you saw that” came a strange voice. And out of nowhere came a figure. “I AM THE GRIM REAPER, Reaper for short, PREPARE TO DIE!!!!!!!!

With that he came charging at Jace and Amber. Amber took out a giant sword from her case and parried the on coming assault. Amber fought The Reaper blow for blow and was beating him easily. “Well I guess I can let her take car of this,” Jace thought. Amber had become in the heat of battle she had already activated her flame powers and was channeling it into the sword. Then the reaper did something weird. He let it hit him. But the blast was instead redirected to Amber. “Now it is time for me to kill,” He said.

“NO,” Jace said as he pulled out his gun and started firing. The Reaper used the scythe to dodge the attack. The Reaper then sent a ball of dark energy and disarmed Jace. “Now you are dead.” He said. Then from out of nowhere came a blast of water that hit the Reaper into a tree and another that hit him to the ground and pinned him there. “WHAT IS THIS?” HE ASKED. “That I said is a trail of water pinning to the ground.” Said Jace. “OH NO” Said the reaper, “YOU CAN’T BE HIM.” “Yes it is I, JACE PHYSIC, TELEPATH, LOBOTIMIST, TOMAKI MEMBER and CHEM MAGE.” Said Jace. “You have two options: 1) I suffocate you with this water or 2) you will become the third member of my team.” “MAKE YOUR CHOICE.”






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KeybladeReaper
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commentCommented on: Tue Oct 30, 2007 @ 08:37pm
I WILL NEVER JOIN YOUR PARTY! THE REAPER CALLS THE SYCTHE TO CUT THROUGH THE WATER AND DISAPPEARS INTO THE SHADOWS OF THE NIGHT.


commentCommented on: Tue Oct 30, 2007 @ 11:05pm
my problems w/ it::: spelling & grammar (but thats to be expected), & in the story... you refer to him as the reaper, but once you call him mike when the readers dont even know him as mike yet.......thats the only MAJOR thing, so i'd suggest you fix that if you can...... =p



genghis the moosh
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KeybladeReaper
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commentCommented on: Tue Oct 30, 2007 @ 11:35pm
NO if he does not meet my demands then I do not want to be in the story.


commentCommented on: Wed Oct 31, 2007 @ 12:59am
Mike did we have a choice to be in your story, No. This is because it is your story and you got to make the rules. This is my story so I can make the rules.



Jace Beleron
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Jace Beleron
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commentCommented on: Wed Oct 31, 2007 @ 01:03am
thanks for the help Kelly


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