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My Insane Ramblings.
i quit my other...i'm going back to bad poetry...
#12 the next part...
I just had to log on this morning....*yawn* i just woke up from a 10 hour sleep fest....I think this tsory is testing me...lol, *anouncer voice* no matter where she is , the MOMENT she knows she has more than one comment on her story, she MUST write another segement. *back to normal* and this time i'm on a laptop instead so i'm typing witha weird keybord...and I'M not angry and i have to make her rant...i think i was angry at my dad and that's why i was able to make him rant...*shug* i dun't know...course i was pretty calmed down bewore i was writing yesterday... and as usuall, thank you for reading this boring story...


wahmbulance Nicolas Stared at her aprehensively at she Trembled against the far wall. Mabey he had gone a little to far with the confessions...

" How...Why...W-hy didn't you tell me?" he flinched at the horror in her voice. He wondered if she had a thing against nearly dieing... " why didn't you TELL me i was sick?" she was shuddering now...he raised his hands in aprehension of the eplosion he senced comming. " DON'T YOU THINK I HAD A RIGHT TO KNOW?!?!?!?!" she screamed at him, and he stumbled back a bit. Nicolas was still taken aback that someone was TALKING to him. He had surrounded himself in too many mouse-like servants than was good for his social life. However while he wascomming to this solution Susan was still staring At him and trying to get breath in her lungs so she could scream some more. Nicolas saw his opurtunity to try and calm her down.

" It wasn't something Human's would have detected." his quiet voice made her pause.

"W-ouldn't have...detected?" she took a deep breath. " And now your talking like your not human..." her voice trailed off as she stared at his face, the breif flash of anger faiding. "does that mean...I'M not human?" her voice was expressionless.

He sighed and took a few steps forward. "Susan... You MUST understand...I couldn't let you DIE..." she retreated.

"why is that Nicolas. Why couldn't let a stranger DIE?!" Nicolas flinched and let his hands drop.

"Because your not a stranger..." his mouth twisted as he looked away. but he looked up to star her in the eyes as he confessed his resons. "Your my sister."



Susan thought her world had already been shattered. but now she relised it had only been fractured. THIS...man had come into herife, RUINING it! and now claimed to be....her brother?! Susan didn't care if it was possible during her spells, she fainted. wahmbulance


I think this turned out ok...tell me what you think! xd






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Neko_Bri
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commentCommented on: Mon Jul 21, 2008 @ 07:40pm
Boring? this is not boring. and Ooh! Fainty! Now we have a time lapse in the mix where anything can happen. XD I look forward to seeing what you have in store, sakuka!
Write on!


commentCommented on: Mon Jul 21, 2008 @ 07:52pm
First you chose to write with a laptop...second i love this and the thing with the thing with the "surrounded himself in too many mouse-like servants than was good for his social life" was hulariuos... stressed



Nejiha
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Winry_Rockbell799
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commentCommented on: Tue Jul 22, 2008 @ 12:44am
Wow, her brother? o_o Nice plot twist! I love the description of him, too, like how he is surprised to hear someone actually talking to him. I really want to read more now! XD


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