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Naruto fanfiction
I'm deciding to write a Naruto fanfiction. Please feel free to critique it as you wish and give input as well.

I skidded past Kakashi-sensei and kept on running. 'He's not going to catch me this time' I thought determinedly. I looked down at my hands and the small bundle that I held, then I picked up the pace. Yep, those goggles were mine for the taking!

"Dang it! Taka, give them back!!!!!" Naruto screamed from quite a ways behind me. 'Sweet! I've actually outrun him for once! I'm getting better at this!' I thought gleefuly to myself and alowed myself a small bit of a laugh as a reward.

This was a game that we had played for quite a long time. He'd piss me off in some way and I'd find a very comical way to get my revenge. I never did understand why the other kids kept their distance from Naruto. He was such a fun guy to be around and he was always able to make me laugh, even when all I could think of doing was cry. I guess that in a way, Naruto has become like a brother and a best friend to me. My name is Takara Mikazuki and this is mine and Naruto's story.






User Comments: [1]
alucard_hatori_90
Community Member





Mon Nov 30, 2009 @ 11:01pm


no misspellings, no incorrect grammar, the prologue (sort-of) looks good, and there's a timeline and scene. sounds good so far keep it up I have nothing to critique on this one. just remember to keep on this one don't let it die like some of your other ones. sorry it took me so long to read this, I just got back lastnight and had to tidy up a little. I like it, so keep it up DAMMIT!!! I can't wait for the next installment.


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