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as the morning dawns (sry for any spelling errors ) The shadow hides my pale face under the moons waining glow. My soul is drained with the fear of being allown. My eyes drip with the skatered memorys of what I held so close. My hands tremble at the site of the early morn. I fall and wish for these days to be over when I am not allown at last. ~Claudia stare if only it were pssible

Posted by: dragonfire1142 Thu Nov 25, 2004 @ 03:16am

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Drake Elias Zephyr
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Thu Nov 25, 2004 @ 05:24am

Ooh! Pretty nice! Good wording, and the spelling mistakes aren't too bad. Sounds pretty deep. ^___^

Here are the spelling corrections, though!

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My soul is drained with the fear of being allown.

It's spelled "alone". =]

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My eyes drip with the skatered memorys of what I held so close.

That would be "scattered". Pretty good guess though =p

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My hands tremble at the site of the early morn.

This isn't really a spelling mistake. What you did wrong is that you used the wrong word since it sounds the same. However, "site" would be used for something else (Example: 'The site of the accident'). The one you're lookinf for is "sight". ^_~

Very good though =D

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