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this poem is about werewolf cool 4laugh and evil twisted i liked

Hello my love. I'm sorry you feel that way, you sound so sad...*Kisses you* Your very talented to write something like this though!

The poem had good imagery and detail in it, more understandable th second time you read it. My favorite phrases are "I live int the hour the moment now " and "The one true king forever lost ...My armies pillage on their lands gorged".

I like them mostly because of the ring to them as you read it--sort of like good rythm and rhyme. The second stanza shows more compatibility in its whole, the medieval-king-and-army thing going for it. Plus, i love everything medieval.

Still, honestly, i dont think i can get a firm frip on what the complete poem is trying to tell me. maybe its because you had an experience i haven't and cant relate to it, or maybe its something else. Either way, its good, and after reading other poems from gaians i would say its better done and written than most of the other ones.

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The poem is good, it just needs more feeling that rhyming words.

Sometimes, because of the rhyme, the poem isn't expressed well. Free verse poems are not easier to write, but are easier to understand. This poem you wrote shows depression, shows a broken heart. A poem like this, written well, will be able to relate to many people, because about everyone, with a minimum of once in their life, get their heart broken.

Just because I didn't really like it, doesn't mean it is a good poem.
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