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Rate my poem? (It's not like what you usually see.) Here's an Indian name poem that I have to turn in to my English teacher on Tuesday (I think). Tell me what you think. Fleeting Nightingale A girl was taken off of her swing and was sent to search for herself in the forest. The trees were small at first and she climbed them with ease until she saw the largest tree in her journey so far. Before she began, she met a Great Deer and it hind-kicked her in the chest having her land on top of the tree. She couldn't move from the shock, so she stared at the sky and the birds that flew past her. The Girl wished she could fly with them as her thoughts chased after the birds when dusk turned to night, so she began to sing to accompany her soaring thoughts as they brought the Girl to her feet again. Rate me?

Posted by: lil_augurey Sun Sep 03, 2006 @ 10:10pm

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Commented on: Mon Sep 04, 2006 @ 12:04am


	I'm not sure what it means but it seems very spritual and strong I still like it!

Commented on: Mon Sep 04, 2006 @ 01:01am


	i liked it 4laugh and if ur teacher says that its not good then...something wrong with ur teacher talk2hand

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Commented on: Mon Sep 04, 2006 @ 01:07am


	oooo so pretty biggrin heart heart I liked it

Commented on: Mon Sep 04, 2006 @ 01:08am


	ah yes. ur indian name poem! it's pretty good there girly. i need some revision on mine. i take it you have mrs. dozier like me and elba? LOL but yes. i find it to be very good myself kyuu <o^_^o>

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Commented on: Mon Sep 04, 2006 @ 02:29am


	Well, I'm no Shel Silverstein, but maybe it could use some simplifying... That's just me. 3nodding

Commented on: Mon Sep 04, 2006 @ 03:52am


	its good. dont forget to double space.

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Commented on: Mon Sep 04, 2006 @ 03:55am


	Nice ^_^ Yay for indian poems! yeah right I hate em!! lol and its Single Spaced, double was for the draft.

Commented on: Mon Sep 04, 2006 @ 04:02am


	That's okay about the spacing. It's just a preview. As the Italians would say: 'Fagheddabahditt!'

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Commented on: Sun Sep 17, 2006 @ 12:57am


	Update: I got an 'A' on it! whee

Commented on: Sun Sep 17, 2006 @ 04:07am


	yes! that is so awsome! Ms. Dozier sounds alot harder than Ms. Troccet(sp?)

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Commented on: Wed Oct 11, 2006 @ 05:41am


	>< Because she is harder than Trochesset(sp?).

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