I made up a new poem, and I want people to read and critique as they please..but please don't go too hard on the flaming...
A Valediction
God be with thee my beloved,-God be with thee!
Else alone thou goest forth,
Thy face unto the north,
Moor and pleasance all around thee and beneath thee
Looking equal in one snow!
While I who try to reach thee,
Vainly follow, vainly follow,
With the farewell and the hollo,
And cannot reach thee so.
Alas! I can but teach thee.
God be with thee my beloved,-God be with thee.
Can I teach thee, my beloved,-can I teach thee?
If I said, Go left or right,
The counsel would be light,
The wisdom, poor of all that could enrich thee!
My right would show like left;
My raising would depress thee,
My choice of light would blind thee,
Of way, would leave behind thee,
Of end, would leave bereft!
Alas! I can but bless thee-
God teach thee my beloved,-may God teach thee!
Can I bless thee, my beloved,-can I bless thee?
What blessing word can I,
From mine own tears, keep dry?
What flowers grow in my feild wherewith to dress thee?
My good reverts to ill;
My calmness would move thee,
My softness would p***k thee,
My bindings up would break thee,
My crownings, curse and kill.
Alas! I can but love thee.
May God bless thee my beloved,-may God bless thee!
Can I love thee, my beloved,-can i love thee?
And is this like love, to stand
With no help in my hand,
When strong as death I fain would watch above thee?
My love-kiss can deny
No tears that fall beneath it:
Mine oath of love can swear thee
From no ill that comes near thee,-
And thou diest while I breathe it,
and I-I can but die!
May God love thee my beloved,-may God love thee.
Please R&R! I wrote this while half-asleep in Psych class today...so please don't kill me!
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