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Why are you stalking me?
Failing
a transfixed glance a hopless stare I'm failing as your name echos out of my mouth the sound is lost in my tears my lips shudder feeling as lonely as the rest of me my mind races to find the answers to your questions my heart is lost in a million pieces as i feel you turn your back to me you warmth becomes ice cold. I'm suddenly at a loss of words as i'm fialing to say what i need to to make you see what you mean to me I watch as you go thru that door I act like it doesn't hurt cover up the pain with a smile, but it begins to hurt inside the more I smile. I don't want to fake this smile i don't wanna fake it like it doesn't hurt. I'm failing to make you feel alive failing to see you smile. Useless as always my words are to you so what do i do besides fail how else do i overcome this feeling of unlovingness how do i break the chains around our hearts I want to set you free i want to be the one you love. I'm holding out for something that feels unreal something some surreal i'm failign to notice the signs that this may turn out to be real>






User Comments: [8]
StrawberryDaifuku
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Wed Nov 22, 2006 @ 06:05pm


If I didn't say it before (even though I know I did, I just wanna say it again) you... are... ********... AMAZING...


HollowLink
Community Member





Sun Nov 26, 2006 @ 06:55pm


thank you very much but its my pastthat makes me so unqie and amazing and you know ir i shared my past with you


StrawberryDaifuku
Community Member





Sun Nov 26, 2006 @ 07:05pm


Okay... but you're still incredible, just because I said so!


HollowLink
Community Member





Sun Nov 26, 2006 @ 07:30pm


Well i am a simple as said by shinedown sory my friend got me listening to them again


BleedingHeartsAndArtists
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Mon Nov 27, 2006 @ 09:58pm


It's really good, except that 'I don't wanna fake this smile' sounds kind of... out of place with the rest of it.

Maybe, "I don't wish to fake this smile' or somethign like that would sound more in place.


HollowLink
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Mon Nov 27, 2006 @ 11:51pm


I am saying in there it is in place it say that i don't wanna fake this smile anymore i am saying i want this love to be real so i can stop faking all my smiles and start actually smiling for a reason


BleedingHeartsAndArtists
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Wed Nov 29, 2006 @ 12:10am


I was talking more about the phrasing, I get the meaning.

'Wanna' isn't very poetic sounding.

Maybe just 'Want to' or 'hope to' or 'wish to' or something like that.


HollowLink
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Wed Nov 29, 2006 @ 08:30pm


Ah ok i got you now anything else i should correct while i am here


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