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im trying to write poems but nothing good is comming out...

poem one:
Two months we’ve been apart
And I miss you with all heart
But you’ve replaced me haven’t you?

She looks like me…
She talks like me…
She dances like me…
But can’t you see she’s not me?

I know your heart is broken
I know you’re sad
It was just a fight
We can make it right

Don’t talk to her like that!
Don’t put your arm around her!
Why are you doing this?
When I said I love you I meant it
Didn’t you mean it?

I can’t believe you gave her that ring
It belongs on my finger
We belong at the alter
She belongs at a different church
With someone else

Two years we’ve been apart…
And I still miss you with all my heart
You’ve still got you replacement though… don’t you?

She looks like me…
She talks like me…
She dances like me…
But can’t you see she’s not me?

You’re still broken hearted
I can see the sadness in your eyes
It was just a fight
We can still make it right!

Take your vows back
Rewind the ceremony
Forget the honey moon
Forget she exists

Two and half years we’ve been apart
And I still miss you with all heart
I refuse to let this go any further!

She doesn’t laugh like me…
She doesn’t write like me…
She doesn’t love you like me…
So why is it so hard to see she’s not me?

Un-break my heart
Un-break your heart
You still love me

At least I always thought you did…
Never say goodbye
((see just doesnt sound right))

poem two:
Walk with me
Talk with me
Dance with me
But don’t forget to want me

Pretend nothing else exists
Give me that ring
Keep holding me
But don’t forget to forgive me

Cuase time moves on
And on and on
But I know well stay holdin on
Just don’t forget to love me

Down the beach
Past all the life guard towers
We’ll climb the steep cliffs
Then sit on top and whale watch
But don’t forget to follow me
Maybe we’ll find a light house

And you can walk with me
Talk with me
Dance with me
But don’t forget to hold me

Cuase time moves on
And on and on
But I know well stay holdin on
((just doesnt flow...))

hmmmmm i cant figure out what to change though....