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time to die life slips away but you wont know until it is your time to go but til it is you'll have to wait for the day you meet with fate the day you breathe your dying breath those you love shall grieve your death they'll bury you down in the ground wishing you to sleep so sound over time they will forget who you are and why they wept rotting know beneath the earth knowing now what life is worth life might end but souls roam free living life so peacfully and when the soul and body part the soul lives on in loved ones heart

Posted by: Blood Stained Hurricane Tue May 03, 2005 @ 09:24pm

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Bloody_HangNail
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Commented on: Tue May 03, 2005 @ 09:41pm


	thats a beautiful poem!...i like it, it inolves death and it rythemes...lmao...no really its good! biggrin

Commented on: Tue May 03, 2005 @ 11:46pm


	It's so beautiful... I love how you can make it so pretty and rhyme without making up words at the same time.

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Commented on: Thu May 05, 2005 @ 06:20pm


	awesome.

Commented on: Fri May 06, 2005 @ 06:49pm


	that was beautiful. it almost made me cry

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Commented on: Tue May 10, 2005 @ 08:01pm


	that was really good, I quite like it...

Commented on: Wed May 11, 2005 @ 03:40pm


	wow thats amazing .. its so poetic .. you really have a tallent^^ update soon id like to read more!!! ^.~

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Commented on: Wed May 11, 2005 @ 08:22pm


	cool. I love death

Commented on: Thu May 12, 2005 @ 11:20pm


	wow I had no idea you were a poet! heart This is really good! (except for the typos xp ) I noticed that you started with a different tone than you finished with. Was this intentional? sweatdrop Never before have I had such high regard for thos roaming souls I encounter... but... If I may put my 2 cents in tosses two cents into a can I don't feel that those roaming souls are free or peaceful. Not those I've met at least. gonk

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Commented on: Wed May 18, 2005 @ 09:35pm


	it's quite devilish. I like it.

Commented on: Thu May 19, 2005 @ 09:59pm


	john! gonk scream

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Commented on: Fri May 27, 2005 @ 08:34pm


	I like it ,its better than I could ever do

Commented on: Fri May 27, 2005 @ 08:54pm


	Very, very nice. It is of death yet not holding a completely morbid tone. You do contridict yourself though, but poetry is not about perfection..it is about expression. Good job. ::nods::

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Commented on: Fri May 27, 2005 @ 11:39pm


	its awesome rock on!<img src="http://home.att.net/~mimisk8/puff26.gif" border="0">

Commented on: Sat May 28, 2005 @ 03:24am


	that is beautiful, yet so sad. wonderful! bravo! bravo! smile

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Commented on: Sat May 28, 2005 @ 03:04pm


	NICE JOB! if i was to vote out of 10 on this,i wod vote 100000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000/10

Commented on: Sat May 28, 2005 @ 03:41pm


	It is very good. "life might end but souls roam free living life so peacfully and when the soul and body part the soul lives on in loved ones heart" This is my favorite part. Keep doing what you are doing. Your poem is very good.

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Commented on: Sat May 28, 2005 @ 05:25pm


	thats a great poem, u should write more u r gr8 at it!!!

Commented on: Fri Jun 03, 2005 @ 05:56pm


	stop being so hidden show how you really are more mad

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Commented on: Thu Jun 09, 2005 @ 05:08pm


	very interesting

Commented on: Thu Jun 09, 2005 @ 10:48pm


	I've read quite a lot of poetry from the forums and such, but this is BY FAR one of the best I've seen! heart Congrats on a smashing poem! ^_~ Keep writing, you never know where you'll end up!

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Commented on: Thu Jun 09, 2005 @ 10:51pm


	i like it..it is very deep..i can almost feel the words...very pretty

Commented on: Fri Jun 10, 2005 @ 01:40pm


	b-e-a-utiful hun.....just like u. biggrin 3nodding

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Commented on: Fri Jun 10, 2005 @ 09:18pm


	that was really good..its so..i dunno but it was really touching i luved it heart mrgreen ninja 4laugh blaugh redface

Commented on: Sat Jun 11, 2005 @ 03:49am


	Looking forward to reading more heart

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Commented on: Mon Jun 13, 2005 @ 10:27pm


	It was a very nice poem, I like it alot, you have a good life ahead of you if you keep this up. 3nodding Write more and let me know and I'll read em. Keep up the good work!

Commented on: Mon Jun 13, 2005 @ 10:55pm


	That poem was what you felt, even if I don't quite agree and enjoy it, not saying that I don't, as long as it is in your heart...it's beautiful...If you expressed your true feelings, no matter what anyone says, it's beautiful.

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Commented on: Wed Jun 15, 2005 @ 08:24pm


	I heart love heart it I've read many poems written by people who try to do something like this but right now yours is one of the top ones that stand above the crowd 3nodding 3nodding 3nodding

Commented on: Fri Jun 17, 2005 @ 04:03pm


	congrats I see many people liked it (I did too) keep it up ya?

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Commented on: Wed Jun 22, 2005 @ 08:03pm


	I'm your #1 fan and WOW!

Commented on: Mon Jun 27, 2005 @ 10:57pm


	wow, ypur friend i_have_a_belly_button was right! you really are good! keep up the great work and post more poems please!!! heart heart heart now i'm a huge fan!!! (add me to your fangirls list if you wish to wink )

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Commented on: Thu Jun 30, 2005 @ 10:31pm


	omg that was amazing. i can see why you are tightass69's imspiration...

Commented on: Thu Jul 07, 2005 @ 06:15pm


	Quote: and when the soul and body part the soul lives on in loved ones heart Tis true in so many ways. No matter what happens after someone perishes, no matter how long after it is....people will still think of you therefore you still exist. It's beautiful, maybe you could read my poems sometime?

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