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Poem
So, as I have metioned before, I like to write. I find it exhilarating and uplifting. If something is bothering me, I can always write. If I am in a great mood, I can write. No matter what is going on, I will always have my writing.

That being said, I would like to share one of my favorite poems of mine. I wrote this a few years back when I was going through a rough patch. I look back on it now, and it is quite sad. However, I think it is well written, and if you would t=like to give some input, I would love to hear it.

So without further ado......



Silence
By: Me

Mind abright like glowing sphere
Unspoken words I long to hear
Never mending mine heart broken
Almost near the stars awoken

Dark and dank I sit alone
Streams run down the slippery stone
Wishing for smooth hands to touch
Knowing I'll never get that much

Persisting screams push from within
Containment seems to always win
Never sure of what to say
Closed my lips will seemingly stay

Constricting me, the pain keeps growing
Hoping, praying, yet never knowing
With whispering voice I share my feelings
Wishing for my own healings

Though with sightless feet I go on walking
Yet my eyes will forever keep talking
With no love, continue I must
Down life's path, allowing no lust

Sighs and cries, I can hear
Never having mine face show fear
Silently loving you forever long
Even when my heart screams it's wrong


Well, what do you think? How was it? Do I write well? Did you like the poem? ODes it need work? Give me some feedback. I would love to hear your opinion.

Thanks

Walker Ambrose
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  • User Comments: [2]
    Trae Blackhawk
    Community Member





    Sat Aug 23, 2008 @ 09:12pm


    Wow Jaylor. That was intense. I really liked it. You write so well. You should continue with your writing. You are really good at it. I havn't read anything like that in a while. You should put more of your work on here. I am sure people would love to read it.


    Walker Ambrose
    Community Member





    Sat Aug 23, 2008 @ 09:17pm


    Thanks Trae. I enjoy writing so much. I just thought that I would put something on here that I have written and see what people really think of it.


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