UnderworldTorrent
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 3/3/2/5[8]
『Creativity:』 2/2/1/3[5]
『Cohesiveness:』 3/1/2/3[6]
『Completeness:』 3/4/1/5[8]
『Critical:』
0 As Last of 9 stated, it's hard to make realism interesting in modern-era work. Definitely can't wait to see what you come up with, but you haven't wowed me yet.
0 realism is hard to add interest to, but there wasn't anything horrible or exceptional about the story or design
-1 You've got the realism down, just a little bland.
『Overall:』 15[26]
『Character:』 3/3/2/5[8]
『Creativity:』 2/2/1/3[5]
『Cohesiveness:』 3/1/2/3[6]
『Completeness:』 3/4/1/5[8]
『Critical:』
0 As Last of 9 stated, it's hard to make realism interesting in modern-era work. Definitely can't wait to see what you come up with, but you haven't wowed me yet.
0 realism is hard to add interest to, but there wasn't anything horrible or exceptional about the story or design
-1 You've got the realism down, just a little bland.
『Overall:』 15[26]
Sophie is a Ninja
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 2/1/3/4[6]
『Creativity:』 3/4/2/6[9]
『Cohesiveness:』 2/2/-1/1[3]
『Completeness:』 1/2/1/3[4]
『Critical:』
-1 I noticed a slight discrepancy in your story. Namely entering a locked door. Did she have the key? Had it been left cracked ever so slightly? There's a bit of detail left out right there.
+1 I do see the whole disgruntled employee in the avatar though.
+1 the character image seems to be there
0 Creative elemental item choice, but on the other hand it is kinda fugly.
『Overall:』 15[23]
『Character:』 2/1/3/4[6]
『Creativity:』 3/4/2/6[9]
『Cohesiveness:』 2/2/-1/1[3]
『Completeness:』 1/2/1/3[4]
『Critical:』
-1 I noticed a slight discrepancy in your story. Namely entering a locked door. Did she have the key? Had it been left cracked ever so slightly? There's a bit of detail left out right there.
+1 I do see the whole disgruntled employee in the avatar though.
+1 the character image seems to be there
0 Creative elemental item choice, but on the other hand it is kinda fugly.
『Overall:』 15[23]
mildly.amused.froggy
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 0/-1/1/0[0]
『Creativity:』 5/4/3/7[12]
『Cohesiveness:』 3/2/4/6[9]
『Completeness:』 2/3/-3/0[2]
『Critical:』
+2 I love the whole kid's story-book feel to the story, very creative.
+2 for the very creative and simplistic way of telling her story
+2 LOVE, the contrast with your elemental item is nice.
-2 I think by doing the writing the way you did, you miss out so much on the character of your avatar.
『Overall:』 15[27]
『Character:』 0/-1/1/0[0]
『Creativity:』 5/4/3/7[12]
『Cohesiveness:』 3/2/4/6[9]
『Completeness:』 2/3/-3/0[2]
『Critical:』
+2 I love the whole kid's story-book feel to the story, very creative.
+2 for the very creative and simplistic way of telling her story
+2 LOVE, the contrast with your elemental item is nice.
-2 I think by doing the writing the way you did, you miss out so much on the character of your avatar.
『Overall:』 15[27]
lovest harding
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 4/4/5/9[13]
『Creativity:』 4/0/4/4[8]
『Cohesiveness:』 2/-2/3/1[3]
『Completeness:』 3/1/5/6[9]
『Critical:』
+1 Definitely a lot of thought put into the creation of the avatar and the story. I'm thanking you for shortening the story as I am sort of afraid of what that could have become.
0 The story was good, but ultimately a bit over written and the design of the avatar is fairly dull.
+1 Probably my favorite, great emotion and depth in the character.
『Overall:』 21[35]
『Character:』 4/4/5/9[13]
『Creativity:』 4/0/4/4[8]
『Cohesiveness:』 2/-2/3/1[3]
『Completeness:』 3/1/5/6[9]
『Critical:』
+1 Definitely a lot of thought put into the creation of the avatar and the story. I'm thanking you for shortening the story as I am sort of afraid of what that could have become.
0 The story was good, but ultimately a bit over written and the design of the avatar is fairly dull.
+1 Probably my favorite, great emotion and depth in the character.
『Overall:』 21[35]
『Darkness』
--Eroded-Mercury-Veins--
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/4/-1/3
『Creativity:』 ?/2/2/4
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/1/3
『Completeness:』 ?/1/-3/-2
『Critical:』
-2 the story, although simple and sweet was still not well written.
0 'The story' was very dry. Try to expand in further entries.
『Overall:』 6
『Character:』 ?/4/-1/3
『Creativity:』 ?/2/2/4
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/1/3
『Completeness:』 ?/1/-3/-2
『Critical:』
-2 the story, although simple and sweet was still not well written.
0 'The story' was very dry. Try to expand in further entries.
『Overall:』 6
fluff monster
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/3/3/6
『Creativity:』 ?/0/3/3
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/2/4
『Completeness:』 ?/1/-2/-1
『Critical:』
0 nothing to exceptional
-1 the elemental item choice really goes against your look, there is contrast and then there is tacked on. Unfortunately the jack seems to be the latter.
『Overall:』 11
『Character:』 ?/3/3/6
『Creativity:』 ?/0/3/3
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/2/4
『Completeness:』 ?/1/-2/-1
『Critical:』
0 nothing to exceptional
-1 the elemental item choice really goes against your look, there is contrast and then there is tacked on. Unfortunately the jack seems to be the latter.
『Overall:』 11
Jamais Changeant
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/3/4/7
『Creativity:』 ?/3/4/7
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/4/6
『Completeness:』 ?/4/5/9
『Critical:』
+1 just for the overall choice in color and design
+2 those extra avatars really added to the entry. Interesting to see the development of the character.
『Overall:』 32
『Character:』 ?/3/4/7
『Creativity:』 ?/3/4/7
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/4/6
『Completeness:』 ?/4/5/9
『Critical:』
+1 just for the overall choice in color and design
+2 those extra avatars really added to the entry. Interesting to see the development of the character.
『Overall:』 32
Music For My Soul1
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/2/-1/1
『Creativity:』 ?/4/2/6
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/3/3/6
『Completeness:』 ?/2/-1/1
『Critical:』
-2 shall we only know of your character as 'she?' The story was extremely dull.
+0 Aesthetically the avatar is fine, the written portion needs some work though.
『Overall:』 12
『Character:』 ?/2/-1/1
『Creativity:』 ?/4/2/6
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/3/3/6
『Completeness:』 ?/2/-1/1
『Critical:』
-2 shall we only know of your character as 'she?' The story was extremely dull.
+0 Aesthetically the avatar is fine, the written portion needs some work though.
『Overall:』 12
『Earth』
CA3SAR
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/4/1/5
『Creativity:』 ?/4/2/6
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/-2/3/1
『Completeness:』 ?/-1/0/-1
『Critical:』
+1 I wasn't impressed with the design of the avatar because of some of the impractical things, but the story was great.
+0 not much to say, I wasn't wow'd but it was still a solid entry.
『Overall:』 12
『Character:』 ?/4/1/5
『Creativity:』 ?/4/2/6
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/-2/3/1
『Completeness:』 ?/-1/0/-1
『Critical:』
+1 I wasn't impressed with the design of the avatar because of some of the impractical things, but the story was great.
+0 not much to say, I wasn't wow'd but it was still a solid entry.
『Overall:』 12
A_Homeless_Nobody
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/1/4/5
『Creativity:』 ?/2/4/6
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/1/3
『Completeness:』 ?/1/4/5
『Critical:』
-1 I was rather impressed with the story and the transitions of the avatars, but the design of the avatar was just okay.
+2 Great story, I look forward to more from you.
『Overall:』 20
『Character:』 ?/1/4/5
『Creativity:』 ?/2/4/6
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/1/3
『Completeness:』 ?/1/4/5
『Critical:』
-1 I was rather impressed with the story and the transitions of the avatars, but the design of the avatar was just okay.
+2 Great story, I look forward to more from you.
『Overall:』 20
Ratt Scabies
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/5/4/9
『Creativity:』 ?/5/5/10
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/4/4/8
『Completeness:』 ?/4/3/7
『Critical:』
+2 I felt this avatar looked the most complete in all story and design
+4 I don't know what it is about your avatar but all together it is so appealing, I love what you did with the snow.
『Overall:』 40
『Character:』 ?/5/4/9
『Creativity:』 ?/5/5/10
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/4/4/8
『Completeness:』 ?/4/3/7
『Critical:』
+2 I felt this avatar looked the most complete in all story and design
+4 I don't know what it is about your avatar but all together it is so appealing, I love what you did with the snow.
『Overall:』 40
The Beautiful and Damned
No Entry Round 1 - Eliminated!
『Fire』
ooky dookz
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/1/2/3
『Creativity:』 ?/-1/2/1
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/-1/1/0
『Completeness:』 ?/-1/0/-1
『Critical:』
-1 story was bland, and so was the avatar.
-1 Just not that inspiring. Sorry.
『Overall:』 1
『Character:』 ?/1/2/3
『Creativity:』 ?/-1/2/1
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/-1/1/0
『Completeness:』 ?/-1/0/-1
『Critical:』
-1 story was bland, and so was the avatar.
-1 Just not that inspiring. Sorry.
『Overall:』 1
F u n k y G a n j a
Removed
Elphaba the Renthead
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/4/5/9
『Creativity:』 ?/4/4/8
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/4/4/8
『Completeness:』 ?/4/5/9
『Critical:』
+3 a very well rounded entry, and I rather enjoyed reading the story (despite its length)
+3 The colour choices really make it pop. Probably the best of the bunch. You'll do well.
『Overall:』 40
『Character:』 ?/4/5/9
『Creativity:』 ?/4/4/8
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/4/4/8
『Completeness:』 ?/4/5/9
『Critical:』
+3 a very well rounded entry, and I rather enjoyed reading the story (despite its length)
+3 The colour choices really make it pop. Probably the best of the bunch. You'll do well.
『Overall:』 40
~Swift~
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/-2/4/2
『Creativity:』 ?/3/5/8
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/1/2/3
『Completeness:』 ?/2/4/6
『Critical:』
-1 massive paragraphs, and cluttered avatar detract from teh character
-1 Enter key. A small thing but would make the entry so much more enjoyable to read. And maybe a little too much accent/slur. (I do like it, but at points a little overkill)
『Overall:』 17
『Character:』 ?/-2/4/2
『Creativity:』 ?/3/5/8
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/1/2/3
『Completeness:』 ?/2/4/6
『Critical:』
-1 massive paragraphs, and cluttered avatar detract from teh character
-1 Enter key. A small thing but would make the entry so much more enjoyable to read. And maybe a little too much accent/slur. (I do like it, but at points a little overkill)
『Overall:』 17
『Water』
Quiet Judgments
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/5/4/9
『Creativity:』 ?/5/5/10
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/3/3/6
『Completeness:』 ?/4/4/8
『Critical:』
0 the text was a bit annoying to read because it was just one big wall, but the avatar idea was great
-1 Colour text EXPLOSION. Same as above. make the enter key your friend. Love your elemental item choice though.
『Overall:』 32
『Character:』 ?/5/4/9
『Creativity:』 ?/5/5/10
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/3/3/6
『Completeness:』 ?/4/4/8
『Critical:』
0 the text was a bit annoying to read because it was just one big wall, but the avatar idea was great
-1 Colour text EXPLOSION. Same as above. make the enter key your friend. Love your elemental item choice though.
『Overall:』 32
The Angelic Oreo
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/3/1/4
『Creativity:』 ?/3/1/4
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/3/5
『Completeness:』 ?/2/-2/0
『Critical:』
-2 The avatar was okay, but the story was horrible in its entirety.
-2 It looks like you accidentally came up with a blend from light to dark tones. So kudos. The Text With Every Word Capitalized Got Old Fast Though.
『Overall:』 9
『Character:』 ?/3/1/4
『Creativity:』 ?/3/1/4
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/2/3/5
『Completeness:』 ?/2/-2/0
『Critical:』
-2 The avatar was okay, but the story was horrible in its entirety.
-2 It looks like you accidentally came up with a blend from light to dark tones. So kudos. The Text With Every Word Capitalized Got Old Fast Though.
『Overall:』 9
SchwarzWeiss
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/2/2/4
『Creativity:』 ?/1/3/4
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/3/2/5
『Completeness:』 ?/3/0/3
『Critical:』
+1 looks very much like an anime japanese girly school boy
+0 A solid entry, but not compelling or inspiring.
『Overall:』 17
『Character:』 ?/2/2/4
『Creativity:』 ?/1/3/4
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/3/2/5
『Completeness:』 ?/3/0/3
『Critical:』
+1 looks very much like an anime japanese girly school boy
+0 A solid entry, but not compelling or inspiring.
『Overall:』 17
Dreadful Silence
⊱Ratings: Xolkiyr/Last of 9/general_amlex/Overall⊰
『Character:』 ?/-2/1/-1
『Creativity:』 ?/-1/2/1
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/1/1/2
『Completeness:』 ?/1/0/1
『Critical:』
-2, simply for the design of the avatar. There was very little to it, in a simple swimsuit design more detail to the face should have been added.
-2 when it is so 'simple' that I feel the need to count the items... it is not a good thing. (I counted 6 by the way, including the eyes).
『Overall:』 -1
『Character:』 ?/-2/1/-1
『Creativity:』 ?/-1/2/1
『Cohesiveness:』 ?/1/1/2
『Completeness:』 ?/1/0/1
『Critical:』
-2, simply for the design of the avatar. There was very little to it, in a simple swimsuit design more detail to the face should have been added.
-2 when it is so 'simple' that I feel the need to count the items... it is not a good thing. (I counted 6 by the way, including the eyes).
『Overall:』 -1
