- "Quick move they are trailing near behind us!" a young man with scars on his face and gleaming silver hair called to the other members of his party. "Kyo slow down i....i...i can keep up" a women with soft skin and black hair said "Kyo....Reika cant keep up with us...." The extremely tall and muscular mans said. "ugh Daimonji, pick up Reika" Kyo commanded at Daimonji. Stopping for the moment Daimonji sattled Reika's stomach on over his shoulder. faster and faster they ran as the enemy armies follow close behind. the sound of the boots from the party was clouded by the sound of the metal from the iron boots of the foot soldiers. "we won't lose them..." Daimonji said while they continued running. "kyo stop..." Daimonji said. Daimonji handed Reika to kyo. "What are you doin Daimonji?" Reika asked. "buying time." Daimonji said and turned about faced from his direction. readying his fist in a fighting posistion and yelled at the two behind him "GO, you will survive and live together, the love you bare is eternal....that will drive you to live!" the sound of iron was made louder. "what about you Daimonji?"Kyo asked sternly "i will die here and i will join my fallen comrades....you two have no querall here." Daimonji replyed "thank you Daimonji" kyo said while running holding Reika in his arms. Still being able to barely see Daimonji as he battled his armored foes. "GRAAAAAAHHHHH" a scream heard vaguly by kyo and Reika's ears as they continue running and tearing for their fallen comrade.
- by Benevolant Pandaking |
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- | Submitted on 07/21/2008 |
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- Title: Hasty retreat
- Artist: Benevolant Pandaking
- Description: battlefield shamming
- Date: 07/21/2008
- Tags: shortsadcornystory
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- Kekui - 07/21/2008
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it's a good short story plot, but you need to work on it. a lot. you keep on switching the tense, and the adjectives could be a lot better (an example is tearing = crying) - Report As Spam