- 'Its just a normal day.' she thought. Even when she told herself that she still didn't believe it. This morring she felt diffrent. When she felt like that something bad will happen today. She slowly got ready for the long boring day of school ahead when she seen something out of order. She looked out the window and tried to see out the fog. Just outside her window there was three shadows. These shadows weren't the same, one was shorter than the others and another held a long shaft in its right hand. Closeing her eyes and blinking twice she looked out side again but they were gone. 'Your just seeing things.' she told herself but what she didn't expect was whats to come.
- by punkpanda47 |
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- | Submitted on 10/02/2008 |
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- Title: The day they came part one
- Artist: punkpanda47
- Description: I wanted to write something and to see if I had the skill for everyone to like it. comment me even ifs its bad plz!
- Date: 10/02/2008
- Tags: they came part
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Comments (2 Comments)
- EmoMuffin2468 - 10/02/2008
- nice foreshadowing in the beginnning and it does pull you in. good job but you got to the point a little too fast. try giving it a bit more of a build up. other than that, great job!
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- gigidoll26 - 10/02/2008
- ..........i dont no wat 2 say.but wat i will say is,wow.this is a story that pulls u in and makes u want 2 no wat happnes next.bravo!!!!
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