- I walk and walk but it seems that nobody wants me. I can't go anywhere. I'm feel all alone and I feel like it would stay that way forever. Even if I try to keep my head is up, my hopes are still down. I continue my quest, in the rain, sad and heart broken as I leave the tenth town. My head hanging low, my shoulders drooped. As I walk, I listen to everything around me. Beside the faint pitter-patter of the rain and the sound of my paws, there is silence in the air. The cold air and the silence sends a shiver though me. As the rain dies down, I stopped at a big oak tree in front of a hill to rest and dry. I hear a twittering of baby birds safe and dry under their mother,as I look up. I envy them. They have a mother and father but I have nether. I heard the chattering of a chipmunk as it stares at me. I start to cry for the sound of it sounds like it's teasing me. I could've knocked it out of the tree and killed that that second, but I didn't for I knew how it's family would feel if I killed it. They would be sad and would suffer like me. I couldn't think about how I would feel knowing that they would suffer because of what I did. I knew it wasn't they're fault that I was sad and alone. After I had a short rest, I started my climb up the hill. I feel tired and exhausted by the time I got to the top. I thought my quest would never end. As I was about to give up on my search for love, I felt a warm, light breeze fill the air around me and the faint scent of rose petals as they blow in the wind. It soothes my soul and calms me.It seems to tell me that everything will be alright and I shouldn't worry. I look down and see a town not far away. I enter the town refreshed and full of life for I'm confident that I will succeed today!
- by Aki Amaterasu |
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- | Submitted on 10/26/2008 |
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- Title: Unwanted
- Artist: Aki Amaterasu
- Description: Please Rate
- Date: 10/26/2008
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Aki Amaterasu - 01/13/2009
- Thanks alot!
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- Binku_Muja- - 01/12/2009
- i could be it if you want. nice work though. biggrin
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- Aki Amaterasu - 01/03/2009
- Well, yes, my grammar could use some work. I'm not sure who my editor should be though.
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- sylviaviridian - 01/03/2009
- Your grammar could use some work, but you've got good description here. Have you considered getting a beta-reader, someone to help edit your stories? Even professional writers have editors for that kind of thing.
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- Aki Amaterasu - 10/30/2008
- I decided not to make it a chapter story. I'll just leave it like this.
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- august-dawn - 10/26/2008
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Wow, thats a really good story.
Ideas? Well mabey he could find his mother? or someone who feels abandoed, just like him, mabey? Anyway, great story ^_^ - Report As Spam
- Aki Amaterasu - 10/26/2008
- I edited it into a chapter story. Have any ideas what should happen in the next chapter?
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