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... She wore a little olive brown jacket, and the wind was blowing through her hair. She also had brown leggins on with white stripes on them.
I was standing far away from her at the other end of the side walk, but I saw her very well.
I've made a few steps towards her, to make sure she was real, because, at that time, I thought she was a ghost, or a ghoul, maybe even an alien from outer space.
" Hello!", I called, trying to start a conversation.
" Hey!" she called back, and smiled, " What's your name?".
At first I was astonished that she was actually talking to me. Me!.
I took another few steps and answered: " My name is George. What is your name?".
"Autum Breeze", said the girl.
What? Autum Breeze? Is that her name? While staring down, I realised that she had little orange shoes on. I never had an interest for this, but somehow it looked cute.
"I'm new here in town. Can you tell me where the elementary school is? I'm kind of lost here", she added, right when i lifted my head back upright.
"Yes, of course! I was about to go there."
" Oh, that's great! Thanks!", she thanked, and hugged me tightly.
What... in... the... World! A girl is hugging me! A girl I met for about 5 minutes ago, and she's hugging me. And her name! What was it again? Autum
Breeze? That's not even a real name!
After hugging me for about ten seconds long, she released me so I could catch my breath again. Somehow, I even fell on my knees. How humiliating.
"Let's go! I don't want to be too late on my first day of school!" She shouted happily.
Right, school. I got back up on my feet and ran after her.
Chapter 2 coming soon...
- by sacreduniverse94 |
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- | Submitted on 10/29/2008 |
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- Title: Autum Breeze Part 2
- Artist: sacreduniverse94
- Description: Part 2 of the kid Autum Breeze...
- Date: 10/29/2008
- Tags: autum breeze part
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Comments (4 Comments)
- this username is invalid - 04/22/2010
- I agree with Scented Crap.
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- Lemon Scented Crap - 11/06/2008
- good, but sorta short for a chapter...
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- Tomotenshi - 10/29/2008
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I do like the story and intend to keep reading it but it feels fairly unpolished to me. It could be much better with a bit more proofreading.
Unless I am mistaken, the girl is being set up as a romantic interest. With that in mind, I do not know if describing her as " a ghoul, maybe even an alien from outer space" is quite right. Well, I suppose the alien part could go either way but calling someone a ghoul has negative connotations not entirely compatible with romance, hoped-for or actual - Report As Spam
- naui34 - 10/29/2008
- pretty nice
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