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This is the third chapter of Death is no joke. Follow the links:
Death is no joke: http://gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=100410509
Death is no joke-Part 2: http://gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=100411039
I could feel my body jolt back to life. I opened my eyes. I was in a hospital, laying down on a couch in the waiting room. I quickly got up, and buried my face in my hands. Why? Why was I here? What the heck was going on?
Then I remember. Last night, the murder. My parents were dead. Dead as a doornob, however dead a doornob might be.
"You're up," a voice above me said.
"Y-yeah, I suppose I am..." I replied, instantly lifting my head. It was a nurse. Pretty, I guess, but I suppose all nurses are somewhat pretty. She was holding a clipboard, and tapping it with her pencil, a nervous habbit, I supposed. She smiled at me.
"What of my parents?" I said abruptly, getting straight to the point. The nurse frowned for a second, then quickly regained her composure.
"Would you like a drink?" she asked, just as abruptly trying to change the subject. "Apple juice?" I shook my head.
"Are they dead?" I persisted. She put down her clipboard, and sat next to me.
She folded her hands, and put them to her forehead. I could see a tear rolling down her cheek, as she looked at me and told me,
"I'm so sorry...Your father is dead. And your mother has a severe coma." I was out. I didn't know what to say, I didn't know how to react. Not that I really doubted that they were dead. Just that...having it comfirmed and said to my face was horrible. I got up, and rushed to the bathroom.
I locked myself in the stall. I kicked at the wall, snarling and growling, tears pouring down my cheeks. I looked up at the ceiling, and started shouting,
"Is that how you wanna play?! YOU WANNA PLAY THAT WAY?!?! Fine! I'll..." Tears replaced my anger, and I said quietly,
"I'm sorry, God. I'm so...sorry." I tried to look at things in a positive way. Well, my mother wasn't dead. Officially, that is. She was in a coma. Although it's hard to think of someone being in a concussion a "relief".
It is so cliche for one to say in a story "it felt like it was a dream. It wasn't real". But that's how it honestly felt. You will never understand this sort of feeling until you're going through it.
I sat on the tiolet for another two hours. Thoughtless, speechless. This wasn't a dream. It was a nightmare.
- by BeaniesFTW |
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- | Submitted on 11/26/2008 |
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- Title: Death is no joke-Part 3
- Artist: BeaniesFTW
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Yes, I'm a Christian. So, don't tell me it's politically incorrect to put God in my story. I'M CHRISTIAN, SO I HAVE A RIGHT TO DO SO!
Anyway, I hope you are enjoying my story so far. If not, well, it's only going ot get better from here. Remember, there's a lot of questions yet unanswered in the story. How does Jimmy's (the protaganist is Jimmy, btw) father know this bum? And...ok, there's not A LOT of questions unanswered, but...
ANYWAY. Please rate and comment. No fowl language. - Date: 11/26/2008
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Stitchesof_Rosestems - 04/22/2009
- you dont have to be christian to mention god in this or anything, and theres nothing politicaly uncorrect with it. still good so far.
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- yuesha - 01/20/2009
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Do you mean coma? Instead of concussion? Because most people don't pass out from concussions, or for that long, either. Just so you know.
And spell check, please. [: - Report As Spam
- Store Bought Bones - 12/27/2008
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I thought it was very good.
Have you read any books with parent deaths in them? It's dead on, the exact emotions you would imagine and feel if it was actually you. - Report As Spam
- BeaniesFTW - 12/01/2008
- scary? hmmmmm...don't see how you got that idea. a little depressning, but that's all.
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- acai121995 - 11/30/2008
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hey people this is a scary story
hahahah - Report As Spam
- BeaniesFTW - 11/28/2008
- thanks. I'm planning on making a whole book, maybe 10 or so parts. just as long as people like it, i'll continue.
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- StarLightVampire23 - 11/27/2008
- AWESOME! IT ROCKED!
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