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BREAKING NEWS the tv said:Wanted murderer for a crime!if you see him call us at 911!Suddenly the trees wambed the window open,Derek went to check as he hid his kids.A scream blursted out from derek as the kids ran to see with there mom he was........GONE!!!Olivia cried the hole night then a scream came from the kids room.......
TO BE CONTINUED IN 24HRS
- by Captain jake102 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 05/23/2009 |
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- Title: The Murderer
- Artist: Captain jake102
- Description: a man on the loose....but where?
- Date: 05/23/2009
- Tags: chase
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Quotesy - 07/17/2013
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Starts in middle of nowhere. Grammar - what is? Spelling use of English? LOL ur fnny.
No, but seriously - what was this? - Report As Spam
- Sebastian the Ferret - 03/20/2010
- it needs building up, like, to the drama. it just suddenly goes OMG! MY KIDS R MAYBE DEAD!!! what???
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- piglet9876543210 - 05/30/2009
- i agree wit X The Programmer X- but other than dat yo story was way 2 short nd not dat igood
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- X The Programmer X - 05/24/2009
- Uhm... a lot of grammar mistakes, and it doesn't make sense. It starts in the middle of nowhere.
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