bigining of a manga story

• Artist: Original Flavoring
• Description: ok well i started a new manga called "roses are red" its lolita type and i just wanted to see if you guys think the plot is good so far.
  rate me stricly and give meh ideas :D
• Date: 08/30/2009
• Tags: bigining manga story

the title is called "roses are red"
it starts out as twin brother and sister and they are at school. modern times
the brother is getting beat up by 3 bully's and the sister is on her way to rescue him. he gets hit many times by a bat bleeding bady [they are only like 10] and just as the sister goes to save him. shes just right by him when a really pretty glowing shpere thing [they dont know what it is yet] and kill the 3 boys bullying him. surprised they look at eachother and black out.
but then all the sudden they wake up [wierd right?] and it looks like there in the middle of a old Victorian house looking around they see a girl and a boy it looks like them... but for some reason the sphere comes up and says "your in 1843 these are your past lives"

Comments

[ariko yamato]

also, make sure to make the story something you like, dont base it off other interests, making a mang is for yourself, not others, no matter what the rest of the world thinks.

[ariko yamato]

interesting ^^ this could be good but it sadly comes down to the art for me. i will add you as a friend here, and watch your progress, i think it is a good idea. as a fellow mangaka its neccesary i meantion that its always good to have more than one plotline. i actually have over 200 ideas flowing through my head right now, just from this paragraph. just make sure not to close yourself to one idea, and be prepared for it to not work out.

[XxGothicElliexX]

Ok well this was ummmm... intresting