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The street was abandoned. Cold and lonely, I stood looking at the moon hoping for something to just kill me. I wasn't afraid. Then, I saw something at the edge of the build above from where I was standing. I watched closly as the figure began to fall. My mouth dropped open in shock, unable to move from the freezing cold. My legs felt frozen from the winter night.
It's body hit the ground with a crackling slap. I flinched and held my eyes closed. My heart was pumping fast. I opened my eyes slowly. After a couple of seconds staring at the silent night street, I saw something move. It's dark body stood up and brushed off dirt from it's shirt. I gasped loud enought for it to hear me. "s**t.." I cussed quietly. It started moving toward me. I stood watching. as it came closer, I could see his image. He was tall and fit. His muscles popped through his black t-shirt. I couldn't help but stare at those hypnotizing red eyes...Wait, why does he have red eyes!?
He walked faster, fists tight at his sides. My heart raced beneath my chest. I started to breathe hard. I wanted to run, but my feet were glued to the ground. I looked down and screamed. There were things, this darkness crawling up my legs. He stood in front of me and grinned. I screamed. "HELP!! HELP M-"
Then, black......
- by -Yuiko-Kitsune- |
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- | Submitted on 11/05/2009 |
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- Title: The Dream
- Artist: -Yuiko-Kitsune-
- Description: This is just the begining part to the story I want to write. I just want feedback on all you internet peoples >.> Please rate and give any suggestions.
- Date: 11/05/2009
- Tags: dream
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Comments (3 Comments)
- wildflower2828 - 11/19/2009
- its very nice.
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- ForestDancer - 11/16/2009
- that is such a cool piece... biggrin
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- poeticality - 11/07/2009
- hi hi! love it so far! in stories, don't be afraid to put the swear word right out. very nice "show, don't tell" and "?" are in front of "!" in "?!" in your second paragraph. but nice stuff - keep it goin!
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