The tale part 6: Slaves

• Artist: BadSeed26
• Description: its been a good year since i have last written the tale but thats because i havent had access to a computer but now the tale is back!!!
• Date: 05/03/2010
• Tags: tale part lord

I awoke in darkness, i didnt't have the slightest idea where we were.... "B......B......Bobora?" iIsaid stuttering in pure fear. "What?" Bobora said in a tired voice. "Where are we? I asked intently. "You're in my cave slave boy" The lord of the forest said with a cracky voice. "Slave? Im no slave! I am Santra. A Warrior!" I shouted. "Not here your not, you are in my land now, so you are now my slave." He said. I got up in anger. "I challenge you to a duel!" I exclaimed. "I dont fight slaves." He said. I launched torward him with Betty in hand, I stabbed him in the shoulder. "HAHAHA, you can't hurt me human." He said. "Now you must die" As he pulled out a mace from his scabbard

Comments

[Quotesy]

Grammar. Using the 'Enter' key to separate speech. Perhaps a bit more emotional impact - how would your character have felt if they just realized they were a 'slave' if they were a warrior? Insulted? Angry? More than likely, yes. Description, description, description. Maces don't belong in scabbards, by the way. Hmm. . .