- It was 12:00pm at night when all was right and old saint nick went down chimneys with no fright with presents only kids could imagine they slept with joy with a smile on there face waiting to say grace at christmas dinner waiting to see the winner at the rac e when they rip open presents they hadwished for dolls,trucks,cars,brushes everyone bashing everyone blushing everone is happy to get what they wanted a special day for them when Jesus Christ died on the cross for our sin with him by our side victory is ours we always win so go ahead and get a good nights sleep and get ready for a new year you never know you might even burst into tears go on getin your bed rest your head and good night tonight biggrin
- by lexiluvsu1788 |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/01/2008 |
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Comments (7 Comments)
- candykisses1569 - 06/24/2010
- the poetry is good i like it CHRISTMAS!!
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- Expertpancakes - 12/08/2009
- agghhh grammar nazi!!!
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- Yumeh Foxy - 07/26/2009
- Separate your lines, use correct grammar, and add punctuation marks 2/5
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- x.Color.Blind.x - 07/24/2009
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Don't quit your day job hun.
Listen to the others advice.
I agree with them.
And be more descriptive.
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- dragonspirit13 - 07/06/2009
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The poem is OK but make sure when you are writing you proof read what you are writing. I wouldn't call myself an expert at poetry but I can tell you that you are starting on a good path try thinking of a topic for example let's say ummmm.... dragons listen you can do rhyme or concrete poems not to mention the many more you can do.
claws of iron teeth so bright scales of the diamonds of the fading light. eyes so piercing remedy's tune merely enough to enchant the waning moon.
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- ryanh2k9 - 06/03/2009
- this poem is allright i like it i giv u a 4star
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- yreivone - 03/22/2009
- hi... although i read your poem just now, i felt that Christmas is coming very soon... i love it...
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