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Alone I shake and shiver, huddled, frightened from the cold
Like that last freezing raindrop, that quivered as it rolled
Down the window pane and stopped, to watch the dawning of the day
The timidly twittering sparrows as they set out on their way
The slow and sickly sun that slides, lethargic through the sky
Clusters of dazed people, aimlessly hurrying by
Calling out, I try to join them, but I’m paralysed on the ground
Doomed to gasp and shudder, while this icy world spins round
Outside, nature twists and sways, a puppet of the breeze
My stomach moves in tandem, I feel sick down to my knees
My heart has frozen solid, and I fear that I might die
When all at once the ice is smashed, and I begin to cry
The sun grows brighter, warm and well, the world is strong again
The blue sky shoves the clouds away, no more a fear of rain
No longer will I live in fear and cower from the cold
In this world meant for the boistrous, the brave and for the bold.
- by weezieishness |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/12/2008 |
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- Title: Winter Morning
- Artist: weezieishness
- Description: I wrote this poem about two years ago. While it is called Winter Morning, and it obviously describes some of what was happening that particular morning, it is also a metaphorical analysis of things I was going through personally during that time. Other than that, what it means is up to you to figure out!
- Date: 12/12/2008
- Tags: winter morning depression
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Xx_Peace_Luver_xX - 07/17/2009
- you don't need to rhyme.
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- xChocolateBear - 07/08/2009
- its really good. (:
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- heart_of_a_butterfly - 01/11/2009
- holly crap thats awesome just like your others!!!
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- abcsaremyfriends - 01/07/2009
- Hmmm...it's interesting, that's for sure. Nice work.
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- Starry Starry Fright - 12/23/2008
- Other than the old syllable, the meter on this is perfect, one of the best I've seen. I love your imagery and you have fantastic diction and syntax. You should be very proud of this poem!
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- Aeron-Mae - 12/22/2008
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Best I've ever seen on gaia so far! Go you biggrin
If you really want criticism then just a few syllable issues I think? But definitely not a big deal.
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- Coloratura - 12/20/2008
- All clouds and cold eventually drift away, i like it.
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