morning and night

• Artist: orangechanel
• Description: um... ive never written a poem before i usualy write storys so ...enjoy
• Date: 09/13/2009
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in the morning a great fire ball rises into the sky or at least thats what we think.
at night it is covered with a blanket woven from total darkness,but light still shines through tiny holes ,but the bigets hole is like a bananana.some days they use the same blanket untill tha bananana tear is a full ball then the egle sews another blanket.
in the morning the blanket starts to fade from black,to purple,to red, to orange untill the sun is free from darkness.then trought the day a the egal circles the other half of the sun.

Comments

[Dannyboi300]

i agree but i think it could use more detail like egle sews another blanket would be better if it said another worm or soft blanket

[[.Ichigo-Chan.]]

i like the idea, but the style confuses me. please write more clearly, if you do this could truely be a beautiful piece. Writing stories is more like writing poems than you think.