Never let you go

• Artist: Lex2442
• Description: i thought of this after my grandfather died. Hopefully this is much better than my first poem.
• Date: 10/24/2008
• Tags: never

I wish i could never let you go.
I wish you will live your life slow.
I hope you will never die at an early age.
Or you will leave me in a very sad stage.
I cant believe it's actually true.
After all these years of loving you.
It's hard to believe it's actually possible.
But sometimes it is hard to accept the truth.
If you would live until you were weak.
My heart will never want to leak.
After the days went by.
My mother let out an unusual sigh.
It was the phone call.
The only phone call.
It can not be...
But soon i will finally see.
The truth will hurt but i will never let you go.
You will always, always, be in my heart.

Comments

[Gravetye]

First of all, I'm sorry about your grandfather. It's hard to lose someone. So now I don't even want to critique the poem. sweatdrop Basically, just follow the same advice I gave to you on your other pieces.

[Lex2442]

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[Xx-Cookie_Chip-xX]

NICE POEM!! IT ROCKS!

[Lex2442]

Thanks to everyone who likes my poem.

[shezacutie]

i think u did a good job

[CRUNK MUFFIN]

It's nice, but.. too stable. You have to make it catchy like..
rhymes
doesn't rhymes
rhymes.
see the pattern?