The Cheated

• Artist: Paper Crane Kiko
• Description: this is a poem about a girl who saw the one she loved with another. she was on her way to see him when she saw. she just sat in the snow and hid and cried and asked herself why he hurt her. then she escapes pain and enters the peae you an't find any other place but death.she left this worl for a calm and dark abyss.
• Date: 12/29/2008
• Tags: cheated

The snow falls; white, crisp in the inky sky.

A rose falls; a scarlet pinpoint in an eggshell abyss.

A girl sits crying out. "Why? Why? Why?"

She's been hurt. She's been cheated.

She sits cold and lonely in the silent wisps.

Snow caresses her face.

She needs to leave this place.

Yet all she does is sits, sits, sits.

Dying inside from loss; and out from chill.

Now she lies dead from pain... so still.

Comments

[faux_fur_rabbit]

It's so sad, but it's really nice. You just gave me the best inspiration for something ever. Thank-you. I'll PM you what I'm doing when I'm done, if you'd like. 5/5 btw.

[Paper Crane Kiko]

thank you so much for your comments.....

[crazy_maniac_chick94]

I really like this one. It's very descriptive and i love your use of personification and metaphors. I would absolutely love to read it if this poem ever becomes a short story. 5/5

[Paper Crane Kiko]

well she was foun the next day dead from hypothermia! so sad!

[Sanguin Lunaris]

So sad, but very nice!

[cabbage_patch_doll_xoxo]

what happened next?

[i_hate_kung_fu_frogs]

REALLY GOOD!