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Tiny blue drops float down from the sky;
Showering everything as it goes by.
I'm like a flower, I love the rain;
And like a flower, I'm destroyed in hurricanes.
I see a bright pattern over my head;
A lightning flash can never be dead.
I count out loud, one, two, three,
Then gentle drums rumble; they're playing for me.
In my veins, I feel a chill;
The drops are getting colder, still.
Heaven plays their drums again;
And each drop begins to meet the end.
I jump inside as it begins to hail.
Creating a white, crystal veil.
I'm like a flower. I love the rain,
And now it's raining diamonds. Yay!
- by FireButterfly767 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/24/2009 |
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- Title: Crystal and Diamond Rain
- Artist: FireButterfly767
- Description: A poem I wrote about rain when it started raining a couple days ago. Please rate it and PLEASE LEAVE COMMENTS. Thanks. And I know the last sentence isn't very good. D:
- Date: 07/24/2009
- Tags: crystal diamond rain
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Star-geeker - 01/27/2016
- Always
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- Minato25 - 08/24/2009
- good
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- FireButterfly767 - 08/18/2009
- sheesh purple-shoes616 u could be a little bit nicer ='(
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- PerpetualxSorrow - 08/17/2009
- hmmm......generally, i like it. its a bit strange and cliche tho. and i think the title should be Crystal Rainfall. i think it sounds better. :]
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- Purple-shoes616 - 07/30/2009
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honestly, it needs some work
for one thing, if you're going to stick with the typical couplets format then you better make sure a) they all fit perfectly and b) the rest of it is eloquent enough to make up for the lack of creativity in the format
it seems a litttle cliche
and the last line makes it hard to take it seriously - Report As Spam
- Lady Lydwine - 07/27/2009
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"And now it's raining diamonds. Yay!"
I love that one. >.< Its just so cute. - Report As Spam
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