another stormy night

• Artist: demented_crow
• Description: this is a poem i wrote because of the affect of storms on me. lol
  
  please comment
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: stormy night

A flash in the sky
A clap in the air
Sometimes I wonder why
I love smelling this air

The drops fall on me
I feel strange all about
I wish that you could see
And how I feel there is no doubt

The wind blows my hair
The breezes caress my cheek
What is it about the air
That makes me feel so weak

I jump into the puddles
Water splashing all about
For this is what I love
I wish that I could shout

The droplets stop falling
The clouds drift away
To feel like this again
I’ll have to wait for another day

The sun reveals its shine
I squint from all the light
I feel dull again
And go into a plight

Oh I wish for those drops again
To fall upon my face
Because then I could run
And dance with so much grace

To feel electricity all around
And hear the thunder slam
To think that I could feel
Everything else is just a sham

Alas, the sun shines on
And plagues my beautiful sight
I cannot wait …….
For another stormy night.

Comments

[Ungoliath]

This one actually is good. I like it. Also...There is many ways to insert "melody" to a poem. I suggest to read more and ask teachers about other techniques.
Nice biggrin

[Kynsa]

Pretty and elegant yet plyful and a bit sad...I like.

[demented_crow]

please comment my poem.