Pain

• Artist: demented_crow
• Description: a poem about the physical pain. which i love. and the mental/emotional pain which i hate.
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: pain

Pain


it feels so good

yet hurts so much

the feeling i adore

but Pains me to touch



it entices my body

but destroyes my soul

rushing pleasure through my viens

but leaves my heart so cold



destroying my heart from within

reverberating throughout my chest

decimating my body and limbs

i keep it at bay at best



you give me Pain

so that i can feel

but i bring you shame

with Pain that will never heal



your Pain helps me fight

your Pain helps me deal

i love your Pain so much

without it i could not feel



just a little time left

sorry it was in vain

i will thank you from the bottom of my heart

until that too falls to the Pain.





by



demented crow

Comments

[Jacy_Arienh_Sagira]

I love the part where you said you love the pain but it pains you to touch it, lol I like the multiple meanings to it.

[XminionX]

good jpb

[Ungoliath]

Well, I'm not too much in favor to physical pain. But I find the idea interesting. However, I will say that you should check the grammar and the periods of this poem. Also, try to don't repeat the word "Pain" too much...Is just boring after the second paragraph. Also, when you write...Try to have a line on mind of what you'll say. Because it feels like too many thoughts on the air, but not a poem or some story.

And I told you, I'm hard with this kind of things.

[Dothie]

I didn`t fill the physical pain but the rest is lovely ^^

[Exploding rainbow]

I love this.
It makes people love pain.

[Vampirebloodlust101]

That is life. life is pain even if your with the one you love.

[The Turd King]

. . .Wow
Without pain life has no feeling.