- I must start my love life over once again. And though I know it hurts I must say goodbye to my past love. The love I once shared is gone to another, and with this vow I take my life. The knife glimers as I drive it into my skin. The pain, my pain, screams and thrashes inside me. As I cut once more, there he comes inside the door, one look my way and they run to my side. With tears in his eyes, he asks me why I took my life, my only answer is this...."when you left, with you went my love..."
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- Title: Time to say goodbye
- Artist: xXxXxbabexXxXx
- Description: I just started to write this poem. NOt exactly sure why, but oh well. Discrimitive comments accepted
- Date: 07/17/2008
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- xXxXxbabexXxXx - 07/17/2008
- ty guyz ur thoughts really help
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- Enigma Knight - 07/17/2008
- I see Poison Needles is a very critical fellow. But Needles is correct. Try changing the layout. It looks more like a paragraph than a poem. Unlike Needles here, I'll go ahead and rate it.
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- The God Bot 4000 - 07/17/2008
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Your layout makes the rhythm almost impossible to figure out. I'm not even going to rate this because I can't tell how good it is if I can't get the flow.
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- whatwhat47 - 07/17/2008
- thats cool 4/5
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